As silently as death itself.

The first frost of winter

Daylight came with silence
the world now dusted white,
Jack had worked his magic
under cover of the night.

Stencilling onto windows
feathered, crystalled fronds
whilst below on cills, motionless
lay tiny frozen ponds.

And hedgerows, sparkled, glistened,
lit by a watered light,
the spiders toils woven there
iced doilies, what a sight.

A bird then pierced the silence
and a shiver through me sent
as it mourned the passing seasons
with a haunting, shrill lament.












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Author's Note

Not sure whether this works !

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Oh man it works! Beautiful classical work with not a foot put wrong. A singing, descriptive piece of poetry

[Gee]

Hi John, cheers.
Hope you are keeping well

[T.S. Ulmus]

Simple and elegant, it's perfect. I found this poem because it was listed as a "related writing" at the bottom of one of my own poems. I'm flattered by the correlation, like "people who like your poem have really great taste in poetry". You really crafted greatness here.

[Gee]

Thank You. A simple poem well received

[Miss Sharon]

Well it works for me! (the spiders toils woven there iced doilies, what a sight.) Iced doilies...what a pretty picture you paint! ~Sharon

[Gee]

So late with the thank you, apologies

[CLR9]

Dude working on a painting like that Bob Ross

[Gee]

Is he still alive ?

[Robert Trakofler]

last night we had an ice storm no snow yet but I love the first snow:) ferver gradually declines from that point:( love the rhyme & flow of this Gee and I will be sympathising with the bird shortly LOL

[Gee]

I've storm, hmmmm, sounds like my idea of a nightmare. Hate the cold :((
Thanks for dropping in Robert, hope all is well with you and Christmas preparations are coming along :))

[Samael]

I love your descriptive words about the snowflakes on the windows (frost) and the intricate designs. When I clicked on this, I was expecting a bit more somber (as the name might suggest) but this definitely worked. Though I wish I could have seen that cold tone to describe... Well... The cold.

[Gee]

Thank you Samael

[Davidgeo]

The third stanza.... it's lovely. I don't particularly care for the rest but that third stanza makes this poem an A+.

You have an essence to your writing that is easily picked up by most people but not easily copied by them. You're a high quality writer in a non-obvious way.... which is pretty much the hardest thing you can do. Well done. You're still an a*****e.

[Gee]

An arsehole that is chuffed you pop in and leave honest reviews :))
Hope all is well with you Save
(Gonna frame the "high quality writer" and go show the REAL arseholes that made my last three years of schooling a shite experience )

[gram linski]

aye, it works, a lovely painted scene as the coming winter draws us in, reading this in front of a toasty fire, snowblind view from window, lol

[Gee]

Thanks Gram. Best place to view snow is from a comfy chair through a window :)

[R.E. Ray]

Seasons bring memories, especially the loss of loved ones. For several years, nearly every close family member I lost died in January, and that made winter even worse. To this day, I despise winter, and January is when I dive deep into blackness. The weather you describe here might be pretty from inside, but the bitter cold in that white ice brings another coldness when we think of the last season spent with a lost loved one. A good write that brings the living a little closer together though sharing.

[Gee]

Good morning, I'm sorry to read that the festive season holds so many bad memories for you :(
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
Hope all is well with you.

[gram linski]

hey R.E. I also lost both my parents round about winter time and their birthdays were a week either side of Christmas and I too get the black mind, this time of year but would like to think they are looking down and wishing us well,

[olla]

I don't get frost where I live now.. but I came from snow country and I miss the first winter's frost.. soon I will be snow starved.. this is quite beautiful.. I have seen some spectacular "doilies" Arachne's children are so inspiring.. thank you for this..

[Gee]

I could do without the cold myself.
Glad you enjoyed these simple verses.
Thank you