She Is Beautiful.

Simple words for my wife

I tell her, "I love you because of, not in spite of "
She sighs,
runs her hands across the "C" section scar,
talks of lipo, tucks.
With an extended "annnnnnd" she fingers her lips,
mentions some film star with a bee stung pout,
talks of tattooed brows,
of laughter lines that require immediate lasering.
I smile, call her over.
She lays in my open arms, head on my chest,
I hold her, kiss her brow.
She is beautiful.
I tell her that every change is part of our story,
that without these we wouldn't have the life,
the love, the happiness we share.
She sighs, " but "
I raise her face, kiss her gently on her pale, pink lips,
She smiles...

Author's Note

Honesty please.

Reviews

[Anise]

These are the words that every woman longs to hear from the man that she loves.
This is beautiful. So beautiful. Leaves a tight spot in my chest. Nice writing Gee.

[Gee]

Thank you.....She is

[Anise]

that makes me smile :)

[Donna]

Honestly, that is beautiful! You are a lovely couple! Nice writing!

[Gee]

Thank you Donna

[tracey]

oh my what a lovely write, im quite new on site and this caught my eye true love, a amazing piece Gee

[Gee]

Thank you..

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Just wonderful that you get to the point where love is the only thing that matters and nothing can separate you, true love right there🌹

[Gee]

She makes loving easy. Thank you

[Mrudula Rani]

A page from your love story!
(I love the picture. You two look lovely together)

[Gee]

Thank you..

[flowerbaby18]

A simple poem can go one of two ways, either it leaves the reader wanting more or it fulfills the reader the first time through. I think the later applies here. I love the simplicity and the love that is shared between the lines. This mirrors a simple relationship full of support and I think your portrayal of that is special.

[Gee]

Thank you...

[Allie Miranda]

Nice, i think it could use some refinement, you use alot of words to portray something that could be cut down. It isn't bad, not at all, but its very narrative, which is a curse and a blessing. The story is clear but it makes it less artful. I mean, nothing is ever perfect (oh boy, do i know that). So maybe, start with your quote in the beginning, no need for the "i tell her". Lets see, "Sighing, [her] fingertips trace a "C" Section Scar". Just word choices could turn this from great, to fantastic. LOL, what do i know.

[Gee]

Thank you Allie. Most of my scribbles need revisiting and sorting, I'm just to lazy to do. One day

[Allie Miranda]

I get that, im just as lazy. My struggle is trying to get good criticism. Many people dont understand the painstaking effort that goes into critiquing and its just like "oh wonderful!" And that doesnt really help me. Ive spent a good amount of schooling on learning to be a better writer and i know that every little comment counts!

[Gee]

I see a lot of wows, brilliant, amazing in reviews when in fact the writing is nowt but bog standard. I'd prefer an honest " that's shite" to a " brilliant" Just in th e hope that a return review is offered. I've read your seize me but can offer no constructive criticism so have said nothing, sorry.
Thank you for taking the time to natter

[Allie Miranda]

I wouldn't say bog, though im not entirely sure how low on the scale bog falls. I think that the messages in your poetry come from a pretty profound place and have alot to offer with the right amount of work. I appreciate the read, also, even if you have no critiques, I like that people are reading what i have to write, thats why i became a writer in the first place. To relate to others and hopefully they enjoy my writing.

[Norman 223]

I enjoyed the uncomplicated tone of this love poem, Gee. After 53 years my wife and I scarcely notice the physical changes, unless we stumble upon our wedding photos. Then all we do is laugh at our ludicrous fashion sense.
Trust and mutual acceptance can iron out most of the wrinkles, but I prefer to consider the strength of corrugated paper.....:-)

[Gee]

53 years, blimey, congratulations. Hope I get granted the same amount of time with the good lady wife.
Thank you

[Taino]

An emotional read. I've benn married almost 40 years and when you wrote "every change is part of our story" that rang so true.

[Gee]

40 years, well done and congratulations. We are 25 years next year, no regrets apart from not having met my wife earlier in my life. Hope you have a great festive and many, more moons together.
Thank you for reviewing

[chhimijiks]

nice poem. you have got a lucid love story in it. i like it.

[Gee]

Thank you....