Remnants of happy

Seperation

All that I kept were memories
and the misery of parting.
You, you added the "y" to ours,
magpie like collected all that glittered,
bubble wrapped, boxed it,
then left me with nothing
but the echo of a slamming door
and heartbreak for company.
Yet still I love you,
cradling nightly your pillow captured scent
as tears wash me into fitful sleep.....

Reviews

[Starholme]

Superb; short, bitter, powerful.
Made me feel guilty actually so it must be spot on !

[Gee]

Cheers....

[Davidgeo]

Mind and body strong grasshopper --- Always look forward, but never forget.

Still, always look forward.

Well done with this. It truly aroused emotion... and that's the best compliment I could give.

[Gee]

Thanks David, appreciate any comments, positive or otherwise.
Hope you are well and behaving !!

[Davidgeo]

That was a nice reply until it became condescending at the end. Don't treat me like a child please.

[Gee]

Sorry if you took it that way, was just tongue in cheek. Condescending not that high on my list of traits to possess but you are not to know that.
Apologies

[Davidgeo]

I'm f****n' with you gee. You can be as mean as you wont to me. I'll always trust that you have at least neutral intentions if not good ones.

It was just too easy that time, I had to do it.

[Gee]

Lol, you f****r. Have a good day

[Davidgeo]

You too doll face.

[Maxwell Ryder]

Wow. I lived those days once. You captured it exactly.

[Gee]

Cheers Maxwell, luckily never been there...

[Norah]

Oh Gee! Always giving me unique sentiments. It is not one of my favourite writings, yet the words and the way you described how you feel were so beautiful and deep. You never fail to amaze me!

[Gee]

Simple stuff Norah, you are to Kind. Thank you.

[Chris Shaw]

Hard hitting, that is exactly how it feels when you are left. Heartbroken and crying yourself to sleep at night. It takes time ......I hope this is fiction and not reality, but in my case it happened. Your poem invoked feelings that I had forgotten.

[Gee]

Aye, it is fiction. Seen a few go through the heartache of seperation, divorce. Never pretty. I'm sorry you've had to go through this torment.
Thank you for suffering my scribblings !!

[Chris Shaw]

Come back for a second read. I haven't noticed any scribblings, just poetry Gee.

[Laurierose]

Most have entertained the company of heartbreak, no matter how unwarranted the presence. Great read.

[Gee]

Cheers Laurierose

[Seriana]

This is exactly how it is. I envy those who've never had this wretched experience. To never know the pain and heartache...what bliss. Nicely penned and perfectly precise.

[Gee]

Guess I’m one of the lucky ones. Thank you for reading and commenting

[Tate Morgan]

Isnt it always like that? If we are the ones left behind we still yearn for their attention.

[Gee]

Thankfully Ive never been in that place so do not really know how I’d react.
Thanks Tate

[Tate Morgan]

i had my first and only heartbreak at 47. It started me writing

[Gee]

Ah well Tate, something good came out of the heart ache. You wield a talented pen

[Tate Morgan]

Smiles thank you

[Lorry]

Whether in it or amongst it, you have captured the essence of a relationship failing in such a way that it feels all too real. Ours to yours and fitful sleep disturbed by all the many thoughts of how it can go so wrong so quickly. Love it.

[Gee]

Hi Lorry, luckily not me.Watching a friend go through the trials and tribulations of separation and divorce. Not pretty.
Hope you are well. Are you back for a while???

[Lorry]

My sympathies to your friend.
Yes, I thought the cafe had banned me though, with all the tech woes they've been having lately.

[49k_jdys]

Oh wow this is so soulful and amazing! Thanks for your vulnerability in this piece!

[Gee]

Cheers.....