A Longing to be held

If only briefly....

Dawns light would bring regrets
whys and self loathing,
but no thought of this now.
Raw, dirty, drunken sex,
a feeling of being wanted, needed,
if only as a receptacle for his seed
was reason enough to share his bed.
And if he held her once spent,
be it only briefly and without meaning,
this would remind her of the way her life was once lived...

Reviews

[MilesLee]

Great emotion, I like the way this flows. Well done

[Gee]

Thank you Miles

[Alexa Apothic Red]

Many accept refuse if 1 gem might be in the heap... but this type of longing is sad... to be held is innate in us.. that level of intimacy far surpasses what flesh offers. It takes a good person to hold another.

[Gee]

Sorry for the late thank you.
Hope you are all well.

[Chris Shaw]

Some people in their quest to find a few crumbs of comfort will resort to taking it where they can find it. It's sad, but it happens. So strong is the need sometimes to have that human contact even if it is fleeting. But I ask myself is it worth it, if the morning brings such regret and self loathing. Well written Gee, the emotional angle comes through well. Me thinks she would be much better off buying a large bar of chocolate (only kidding). Good morning Gee.

[Gee]

Lol, thank you Christine

[Wild Rose]

The need to be held and loved is within all of us
Sometimes - if the right person is near we succumb to it

In the morning (sometimes) we feel regret

Nicely written

[Gee]

Thank you..

[Ms Paragon]

You manage to let us in this woman psyche and feel her raw need to be reminded of what she once had and in doing so she is willing to pay the price when the sun comes up.Eloquent and to the point!Well done!

[Gee]

Thank you Ms P

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Sad to think that some people would allow themselves to be caught up in such confusion, the need to feel loved and wanted, so true in the way you set the scene that so many people take part in...very captivating I enjoyed reading🌹

[Gee]

Thank you..

[emmajoy]

Have had to go back in time to find one of your poem's to review.. and find this... and now, what to say.. Can't imagine how a man came to write such words.. whether tis male guilt or whether tis interest in a woman's thinking. Could be a combination. Can only imagine that raw. dirty, drunken sex is meaningless in the cold light of day.. tis a sneeze or a belch.. or yes, perhaps it's a better than nothing few fumbling, stumbling minutes of feeling another person's body. Don't know, don't want to know.. but oh dear Lord, this is so sad. And finely written.

[Gee]

I guess this came from watching mum struggle to bring her feral brood (7 then 2 adopted) up alone and without money. Her bedfellows, in between two failed marriages, were in the main loneliness and exhaustion, which led to a couple of very brief alliances with God knows who ( 1 resulting in a half brother with unknown dad)
A bit of guilt too I suppose at the way I toyed with many a woman's emotions just to share a bed and body.
Happy new year EmmaJ and thank you.

[emmajoy]

Your middle name is Honesty, Mr. Gee. Your words so often a blade, but - then, at others, a woven coat of tear-soaked empathy. Nuff said.

[Gee]

It would be a far better world if we all took the good from our upbringing, improved upon the bad and then added a dash of what we would’ve liked from those around us. To many copy bad role models

[emmajoy]

My siblings and I were luckier than billions, we were left with this and that that's still burning brightly most of the time. We were also inspired to realise that so many other people had to do without, suffer, and a maned side more. Your mum reads as an extraordinary mum, ours was too but in a different way... God bless them both.. so very much.

[Allie Miranda]

One thing that will really help is replacing elipses ("..." if you didn't know, i sure didnt) with --, it is often used for a pause and helps a reader read it the way YOU would outloud.

[Gee]

Thank youAllie

[Mirror]

Yes, that feeling... completely understood. But It is better to let go than regret... Better to love lost then never love and be loved.

[Gee]

Thank you..

[Bare Trees]

Every human wants to be loved, held, but it is much to their regret when night meets the cold light of day, compounding the loneliness.

[Gee]

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