Etched In Stone

An oldie found and re posted

And with their first breath
etched the first date,
the hyphen is then their life led,
be it days, be it weeks,
many decades or more,
'til a full stop declares
" They are dead "

Reviews

[PatrickPink]

I love the concept of this, your use of rhyme to drive home the link between birth and death is brilliantly done. I do think the third line could be reworked a bit, only because I'm struggling to understand what you were trying to say with it. Sick piece though, well done!

[Gee]

Hi Patrick, the hype between the two dates, birth and death represents the life that we all lead.read moreHi Patrick, the hype between the two dates, birth and death represents the life that we all lead.
Glad you enjoyed. Thank you

[barleygirl]

Despite the short seemingly simple form, your poem conjures up a whole array of pondering in the reader’s mind. It’s very imaginative to think of describing that one recognizable etching upon every tombstone in this unique & thought-provoking way (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Gee]

Thank you Margie, hope you are well

[Neville]

A message to us all... I wonder, how many folk will ponder upon whether like your resurrected poem here, the same principle will apply as much to them at the end of their day.... Nice one Gee.... Neville

[Gee]

Belated thanks Neville

[Neville]

Hey no probs my friend.... N

[Andrea Greene]

Amazing that one hyphen is an entire life. I enjoyed the pondering that this simple piece of art had to offer.

[Gee]

Thank you..

[Coyote Poetry]

Short, strong and worthwhile thoughts in the poetry. I wanted to know and read more. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Gee]

Thank you kindly sir

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear friend.

[Ariya]

Beautifully described. Birth is merely a beginning of the end.

[Gee]

Thank you Ariya

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I love to go to old graveyards, pull weeds and look at tombstones. I've found some very interesting epitaphs. I enjoyed the read.

[Gee]

Thank you..

[emmajoy]

Wonderfully, sadly true./ However, respectful addenum which you probably know: added at his request by Spike Milligan.. 'I told them i was ill.' Yes, irreverent but then humour tops the bill even in tombstones.

Sad creature though i am, living in a county filled to the brim with ancient churches.. i have with and without company, wandered graveyards, sometimes in the drear and at other times in bright sunshine, deciphering where possible, names, dates and epitaphs. A treaured history laid to rest in varying styles of tombs and wording. There is a sadness, yes.. but isnt it sadder still if people beware such places.

Sorry - too much. But your wordsare truly appreciated for style, the poem itself understood in my personal way.. the result is precious sad, Gee

[Gee]

Thank s Emma, simple words which I guess ring true. Hope you are well