Drinking for comfort, f*****g for food

A take on a single mums plight

Four different fathers
a monochrome brood
drinking for comfort
and f*****g for food.
Best before blow jobs
use before shags
payment in polythene
half empty bags.
Laying and lying
but only to self
shop soiled, outdated,
left on the shelf

Reviews

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

What people do sometimes looking for a place to feel loved and belong- sadness as it’s self destruction but each has a path to walk- pray people learn to love themselves no matter where they come from- very direct and full of passion and truth- great words- make people think🌹

[Gee]

Fleetingly perhaps. Thank you

[DarkArtz 0703]

damn makes me think about how much we take for granted this is a F***ed world

[Gee]

Tis more prevalent than many think.
Thank you

[DarkArtz 0703]

no thank you for writing this piece

[FJ Davis]

Devastating portrayal of a depraved existence.
Incredibly sad!

[Gee]

Aye, more common than we'd like to believe. Cheers

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

I'm using discovery and it seems to keep putting me into contact with you like it knows something I don't. As for this and as well with the others your rhyme scheme is tight, the imagery is there, and more often than not I enjoy the hell out of them. So, I have to ask about the with best before part. Do you need with? Is it an instructive label on the bag? Usually like milk it starts best by yada yada or best before such and such date. Ditch the with is my critique my man, feels unnecessary. Otherwise, carry on!

[Gee]

Hmmm, perhaps Discovery is a sadist !!!
Change made, thank you, and thank you for reviewing.

[Sahm Moore]

My fave. I'm not sure ppl catch the 'four different fathers, a monochrome brood' part, but it's absolutely perfect. I'm a fan!

[Gee]

Again thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed reading this. Very much based on my childhood

[Sahm Moore]

I'm sorry for your childhood, then. However.. the 'I am' piece sounds like you've done pretty well for yourself :)

[Gee]

Kids are resilient and at the time because you know no different it was classed as normal.

[Norman 223]

Hard to read, but easy to understand. The luck of birth can govern environment, which ,in turn, can govern behaviour. Those that condemn the loudest, are often the cause of the problem.

[Gee]

Indeed. Cheers Norman

[Lorry]

A unique twist on a not so uncommon situation for many. My teen years were spent on a housing estate with a bit of a bad rep and I saw this and worse on a daily basis. It wasn't all dark skies though, the one thing I do remember is that everyone looked out for each other and knew everyone else's name...Now I couldn't tell you what most of my neighbours looked like if I had a gun to my head. Changed days, in some ways good, in others nothing changes.

[Gee]

Thing is you grow up thinking it's a normal upbringing when it is everything but.
Cheers Lorry

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

"Shop soiled, outdated, left on the shelf"- Killer line, killer poem, killer situation. You nailed it graphically and honestly Gee. Language of the streets perfectly fitting the subject. Great flow and rhyme. Feral mothers trying to survive. "Laying and lying"-scathing, but so real. Brilliant!

[Gee]

This was life in the sixties on the estate we were dragged up on. Many would open their legs, some perhaps to feel wanted, others for financial or gain in other ways. Mum was married to two arseholes ( both left, both are dead ), spawning 6 kids, then a dalliance led to number 7. Her bed made she raised us all single handedly, then adopted one of my nieces and nephews to prevent my sister putting them into care. A special lady.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

You very certainly had a special mom Gee! And a very hard childhood from the sound of it...Your mom had a generous heart and so do you. God bless.

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Brilliant, Gee!

A very painfully brutal write, full of honesty and tinged with a large dose of reality for some in this existence.

Your tone and the rhyme is just superb. Heck! I didn't even know you could swear on this forum! But the vulgarity of those words just adds to the realism and sense of hopelessness of the subjects in this poem.

Extremely well done!

[Gee]

Cheers Doodley, this was life for quite a few on the estate we grew up on

[Great Aunt Astri]

This poem made me feel really sad. It must be terrible to lose ones self esteem, giving up, and doing self deprecating things. And all for the sake of the children? Or is she beyond caring even for them? It made me feel like calling out to her , "don't despair! keep going."! A very moving little poem you have penned.

[Gee]

Cheers. We grew up on an estate where most families were fatherless and those that stayed were on the most part idle, good for nothing wasters

[Great Aunt Astri]

mmmm, sometimes women are better off without that sort. But I suppose the Mums on the estate got together and were supportive. That would have benefited the children too. You seemed to have survived well. As you said in a comment to another person, to children, their situation, whatever it is, is 'normal' to them, until they grow up and find that it wasn't. But children are very resilient, and many great people have had very difficult childhoods

[Tom]

No happy romance or pretty bunch of flowers for this lady, just another day at the office and it's a hard old station!

Powerful and evocative, superb moving poetry Gee!

[Gee]

A rum childhood Tom...thanks