I am....

A constant

I am night and day,
the sun and moon,
the ebbing, flowing tides.
I am the changing seasons,
reliable, predictable, dependable.
I am a smile for a sad face,
a dry shoulder for tears,
strong arms and a soft, kind heart.
I am proud, devoted, loyal,
loving..........irreplaceable.
I am eternally grateful,
grateful that I am her father.

Author's Note

Whatdya think ???

Reviews

[emipoemi]

..............wOw!........I felt the power of this one big time!! Two notes:

1. "the tides" - "moon" and "sun" are possessive (they're hers), and "the tides" seem to follow that, so I would extend this line a bit to specify the tides that do something to her. Or, just change "her" to "the" and make the grand reveal at the end when you say "HER father".

2. "a love irreplaceable" - this line is powerful, but similar to the above note, this is a third item that should in some way follow how the other items flow. Here you have adjectives (proud, devoted, irreplaceable) which are separated by "a love" before the third. Those two words, though it creates a good musicality for the whole of the poem, hitting each syllable hard on their beats adds to the power. So "I am proud (!), devoted (!), irreplaceable (!)......no "a love" for that is already implied. Well done overall!

(those exclamation marks are not stressing to add them, they're just me demonstrating that having just the one word packs a good punch and adds power)

[Gee]

I am a purveyor of simple words but lack your skills. Have made a few changes, better ??
As always thank you. Your help is appreciated muchly.

[emipoemi]

you didn't have to capitalize "her", that was just me demonstrating the reveal. But, yeah, much better. :)

[Gee]

Cheers. I'm as thick as a brick but enjoy playing at poetry.

[KT-B]

No your not Gee! you are very talented! exclamation mark just to give this statement punch!! :)

[Gee]

You'll have me blushing. I judge myself on qualifications gained at school, nearer zero than 3.... Thank you

[KT-B]

Same - I never applied myself at all - oops! :)

[emipoemi]

......I was always the silent one in school......

But I second the notion to never cut yourself short!