A colours choir sang vibrantly

Spring...an oldie given an airing

Heads bowed as if in quiet prayer
the daffodils they swayed,
whilst dappled light through dancing trees
upon the lush grass played.

A bluebell sea rolled silently
to fallow fields yet sown,
o'er which in coming warmer months
a yellow quilt be thrown.

The thin veiled mists of early morn'
that washed the world with white,
cede to the over eager sun
days ever warm and bright.

A colours choir sang vibrantly
from life that bloomed anew,
to celebrate the birth of Spring
now another winter through.

Reviews

[Paul Bell]

There is something very exciting when the flowers appear. It's like the sign for, take some lairs of clothes off. If only nature could keep the garden clean over the winter.

[Gee]

Cheers Paul

[Carol Cashes]

Almost Robert Frost-ery. Very nice. ..."bluebell sea". That's a new description of the deep blue sea and perfect for this ode to spring.

[Gee]

Oh Mr Frostery, if only. Thank you

[Einstein Noodle]

oh man! so glad i found this one! nothing about it wants "changing" ;) a delight to read and experience ..in gratitude for spring, nature and your poem ..very fine stuff says i!
E.

[Gee]

Cheers E glad you approve

[Einstein Noodle]

;) .......................

[Im His Daughter]

Your submission is now read in the http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Nature%2C-Auroras%2C-Lights%2C-Trees%2C-Water%2C-Outdoors-Contest/54059/ please stay tuned for the winning poems. Thank you for your entry.

[Gee]

This has got to be the latest thank you ever for a comment left.
Apologies and thank you

[Richard🖌]

As lovely and enchanting an homage to Spring as I've yet heard, your pen's voice is gilded with sheer wonderment of Nature's heavenly glory.
In beautiful 8/6/8/6 Ballad tempo and a jaunty iambic beat, your lines and verses embrace the mind's-eye and emotions' soul on a vivid poetic journey, not soon forgotten.
A wee few issues spotted by the artist's eye to consider: L1, kick out one of the "in"s. V3L4, make "ever" "e'er" to improve flow and follow the 6-count. V4L3, make "spring" "Spring" … as, in its use 'tis a proper noun; whereas, "winter" is simply "another" winter.
Whom, with an ounce of warm blood pumping their veins, would not love such a heart dancing title, and every verse stands as its own virtual poetic masterpiece; not withstanding, the amazing imagery blessed throughout verse three, and the entirety of your poem's life-giving breath.

An amazing piece, Gee … I love it dearly and thank you sincerely! ⁓ Richard : )

[Gee]

Thank you Richard, corrections made review greatly appreciated

[Richard🖌]

You're very welcome,
It's a wonderful work, Gee … I've read through it several times; truly enjoyable.
You're a fine artist!

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

A bluebell sea rolled silently
to fallow fields yet sown,
o'er which in coming warmer months
a yellow quilt be thrown.

I loved those stanzas the most. "Spring" is always special no doubt...

[Gee]

Cheers Sky. Yep my favourite season

[emmajoy]

' A bluebell sea rolled silently - to fallow fields yet sown, - o'er which in coming warmer months - a yellow quilt be thrown. '

That stanza is as beautiful a tale about Spring as i've read for years and years. Wordsworth's Daffodils could almost eat their hearts out tho i think they could be poisonous.

What fine meter you use, olus, brevity that says it all Beautiful!

[Gee]

Praise indeed Emma, thank you

[emmajoy]

'olus' is Lunar language for 'plus' i believe! :)

[Gee]

Ohhhhhhh, jeez I thought it to be a typo...."Lunar language" never heard of that. Is mooning lunar language or is baring one's bottom in public just wrong ???

[emmajoy]

I repeat... laughingly: you're wicked!!!

[Lorry]

You're getting pretty damn good at this poetry malarkey Gee. brilliantly capturing the changing of colour and light that the return of spring brings to us. Superb.

[Gee]

Cheers Nemo, got to get the words to drop right every now and again

[Lorry]

That's all that we can hope for.

[Tom]

It's -4 below here, so thank you Gee for the reminder that better days lie ahead !

You have romanised the season of Spring with pleasing ethereal effect !

[Gee]

Cheers Tom, can't come quick enough

[Tony Jordan]

Wonderful imagery and tempo that feels like awakening from a deep slumber. Good choice of phrasing. I particularly liked 'colours choir'.
Roll on Spring!

[Gee]

Cheers Tony, appreciate your comments.Will pop over and have a peruse in the near future

[Tony Jordan]

Welcome Gee.