My final breath, a sigh

Accepting the inevitable

I had neither time nor patience
and this I so relayed,
annoyance being the tone I used
but still the stranger stayed.

I bid him sit if stay he must
offering him a chair,
this he declined without a word
but with a steely glare.

That chilled my bones to marrows core
withering my very soul,
a shadow crossing o'er my heart
a shadow black as coal.

It was then I knew my time was his
he'd called to still the hands,
to lead me from this mortal coil
and to the promised lands.

So silently I left with him
my final breath a sigh,
of sadness that my life was done
and this my time to die...

Reviews

[mattavelli]

Lovely write, Gee!
Nice bounce to the lines. Seems a good mood to go out in, no struggling.

[Gee]

Thanks for reviewing Matt, appreciated

[KWP]

Oh bugger ... but why? Why did he have to die? Was it quick? Did he feel any pain? He seemed pretty calm about the whole thing ... I wonder what I'd be like in that situation... probably pee me pants ...

[Gee]

Well if that's the case make sure you are sporting a tenna lady, preferably with wings !!!!

[Gaia Octavia]

I really enjoyed this. I liked your word choices and how they led to a somber (but not sad) tone throughout the piece. It almost feels kind of Poe-ish in its unblinking and unapologetic resignation to death. Very well done!

[Gee]

Thank you kindly

[Fran Marie]

Alas, the grim one doth come calling..Like the serene tone of this fine piece
Nice work..

[Gee]

Thank you very much

[FJ Davis]

The poet makes a powerful case for not letting strangers into your house.
Thought this guy was just going be one of those guests from hell (hopefully, not literally) who is abysmally boring and finds your abode quite suitable for an extended stay.. Never dreamed he'd be the freakin' reaper!
In any event, Gee, "...sigh" qualifies as an excellent piece of work--well rhymed and nicely conveyed.

[Gee]

Cheers Frank, "the freakin' reaper" like that.

[V]

Great rhythm, your words read like a peaceful and content relief. I admire your ability to create such a smoothly rhythmic piece.

[Gee]

Thank you, your very kind. Simple rhyming verse using very basic language is the height of my ability. I sometimes wish I have more to offer but it is what it is I suppose

[V]

It's good this way. I enjoyed reading.

[aziza]

Strong imagination and great mind....really nice!

[Gee]

Thank you for reviewing

[aziza]

My pleasure

[Jamestown]

I was drawn in quickly and held throughout:)
Great imagery,thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Gee]

Thank you JT, appreciate your visit. Take care

[Melinda McQueen]

A very moving, thought provoking piece.
Well written.

[Gee]

Thank you Melinda