My final breath, a sigh

Accepting the inevitable

I had neither time nor patience
and this I so relayed,
annoyance being the tone I used
but still the stranger stayed.

I bid him sit if stay he must
offering him a chair,
this he declined without a word
but with a steely glare.

That chilled my bones to marrows core
withering my very soul,
a shadow crossing o'er my heart
a shadow black as coal.

It was then I knew my time was his
he'd called to still the hands,
to lead me from this mortal coil
and to the promised lands.

So silently I left with him
my final breath a sigh,
of sadness that my life was done
and this my time to die...

Reviews

[writ rajat]

very nice to read no time no patience

[Gee]

Cheers.....

[Great Aunt Astri]

Simple rhyming with simple words ... but oh so effective. You had me sitting on the edge of my chair, wondering if I too was about to breath my last breath! Good poem.

[Gee]

Cheers, simple is as simple does

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A bright pace to this somewhat morbid and once again, imaginative and descriptive piece Gee

[Gee]

Thank you John

[Manasa.L]

Powerful and amazing writing. The stranger is always with us but we only see him when it is our time to go with him.
He who is loved by that stranger, attains salvation without any effort.
Good, nicely done:)

[Gee]

Thank you Manasa

[Papaya]

He is not one to negotiate or discriminate. Beautifully written.
Cold and eerie.

[Gee]

Thank you kind lady. Hope you are well

[Papaya]

You're welcome Gee. I am well and hope you are too.
:)

[Gee]

All is fine in Blighty thank you

[Deandra Dawn]

I absolutely loved this. So hauntingly beautiful.

[Gee]

Thank you Deandra

[Bear]

The grim stranger it is said comes to collect the last breath for it houses the soul. Nice rhyme scheme and a smooth flow, well worded and masterfully written. Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Gee]

Cheers Bear. I guess if you keep poetry simple there's less to go wrong

[Bear]

I saw a tee shirt once that had the saying "Poets say will a lot less words" printed on it and I think that is a good philosophy for all poets, especially epic poetry writers lol!

[Gee]

Yep, some know not when to stop

[Valentine]

This is very well expressed, nice job. Valentine

[Gee]

Thank you kindly

[Muskaan Madan]

This is written tastefully and soulfully. Loved it.

[Gee]

Thank you kindly young lady