Late in springtime

As life draws to an end.....

Now long his shadow 'cross the ground
weak the winter sun,
that sets upon a life well lived,
four score years since begun.

Would springtime greet him one more time
like an old friend at a gate,
he smiled, resigned, knowing well,
not next year, he'd be late...

Author's Note

To short ????

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Perfect number of words. You create the visions and thoughts of the seasons. Left the reader with a good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Gee]

Again thank you.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Elmarie]

I love it. Yet again picked up on your space bar habit. All in all a great read. On to the next one :)

El

[Gee]

Thank you again

[barleygirl]

Frankly, I would like to see more of this train of thought unfolding in your poem. You're really on to something & there's so much more to be said about it. I like that your poem is taking a fresh look at an age-old situation. This time of life is often likened to autumn, & this is one way you're bucking the crowd. Late spring, around here, is the end of green hills & wildflowers, moving into the season of super parched soil & our creek goes dry. Similar imagery could be used to carry your analogy further. But it's also fine just the way it is.

[Gee]

Again thank you.I think I am far to lazy to be classed as a poet(and I definitely am not a "dear/dearest poet...I see that bandied about Willy nilly all of the time)I write everything quickly with little or no editing(as you can see)then put it out to be read,or not.I think there are only" A mother's passing " and "Give me to the summers breeze" on which I took a wee while to sort and post.Thanks

[barleygirl]

Thanks for the heads up. I will check out the two things you mention, a little later . . .

[Tom]

A life well lived with no regrets, what we all strive for really ?

A wonderfully earthy, erstwhile and eddifying write !

[Gee]

Cheers Tom.....

[Great Aunt Astri]

It may be short, but it makes a grand impact. How lovely to be 'satisfied' with one's life. Good read.

[Gee]

Thank you.Yes,how lovely if a rich and rewarding life led and no fear of death upon its arrival.I intend to go out kicking and screaming as I'm afraid,not of death,but of what I'm going to miss when gone !

[A hare off]

Not too short at all, it feels perfect to me. You have managed to express a very vivid scene in a few lines as well as plant a seed of sadness within the reader. That is the mark of a fantastic poet. Great job.

[Gee]

Cheers........

[Dara]

This is a very beautiful poem and I feel speaks volumes. Sometimes 'less is more". I think it is just the right length and one I will surely file away to be remembered and recite to myself during those moments of deep reflection.

[Gee]

Thank you Data,very kind

[ANTO]

Excellent opener dear boy. (Where's Pike?)
The tiredness of the old guy as well as the contentedness is very much felt.
Sympathetically put without maudlin.
'A good innings..." as my English cousins are wont to say lol.

[Gee]

Thank you dear boy,spiffing review

[ANTO]

Your welcome Gee(ves)
Fancy a spot of tiffin?

[Gee]

Is that anything to do with muffin,( not the mule)....Earl Grey,now he was one for the loose drawed women,cucumber sarnies,crustless,petit fours (incorrectly spelled?)then a game or two of hide the banger.Jolly bloody hockey sticks,where's me mallet I fancy a game of whack a sheet through a horse shoe.....Davy"the Alamo" Croquet.

[Gee]

Sheet..sphere

[ANTO]

"Whack-a-sheet" was what Timmy Mallet did during puberty so his mum wouldn't beat him for have hardened bed-clothes.
Weren't you the Earl Grey's batman, Gee(ves)?

[Gee]

Indeed,a man servant of the highest order,where,"do an old sailor a favour " meant much kneeling and jaw ache !! Ahh,those were the days,many happy hours spent with the earl and his saucepans,battleship and slate (strange names for kids I always thought)

[ANTO]

So he tried that old 'order of the garter trick' on you did he ?
*shakes head despondently*
I'm here Gee, if you want to talk mate
xD

[Gee]

I'm scarred,and I brushed my teeth.5-1 Chelsea 50/1..should have had a flutter me old China....Dons were SHITE,lager was fine,me ,my daughter, her best mate Charl and my mates son Ryan had a nice time in TGI Friday's post match(I'm like daddy day care).Good day out.

[ANTO]

You brushed your what? Oh your teeth.. well I guess its okay to still be allowed out then. Yeah, 50/1 that would have been nice. I'm glad you had a good day out matey - I was worried you would get lost and have the children running around panicking.

[alifeacoustic]

Beautifully written Gee. Four score years well lived. I can't but help imagining all the tales that life has to tell. The final line is so poignant and touching. Superbly done Sir.

[Gee]

Thank you kindly

[Woody]

sweetly wistful. lovely. short? what the hell can you add to that? just perfect.

[Gee]

Cheers Woody