Give me to the summer breeze

One final walk together An oldie updated 28/02/20

It's time my love you lived again
removed the widow's black,
leave sorrow for all yesterday's
invite happiness "come back"

So don a dress of pastel hues
paint a smile upon your face,
walk me for a last time dear
to my final resting place.

Take me to the highest hill
give me to the summer breeze,
to gently fall on lush green grass
'neath the shade of aged trees.

Then take your leave, live again
let another share your heart,
as I will love for eternity,
we will never truly part.

Reviews

[SyberRose]

A lovely piece you have skillfully penned to perfection...Enjoyed very much...Rose

[Gee]

Thank you kindly

[Loubelle]

This is so rhythmic it could be put to music. Most people don't do this well placing the words just right to get the perfect sound pattern. I really, really like it. Makes me think of Poe's Annabel Lee except your tone is not so bitterly hopeless.

[Gee]

Thank you for the kind review

[marcus]

Very nice!, Beautiful write!!

[Gee]

Cheers Marcus

[Divya]

Lovely poem. Touches heart. Beautifully written.

[Gee]

Thank you..

[Bear]

Masterfully written, your rhyming scheme as well as the reading meter could not be better, the old English style vocabulary adds so much character to this piece. In the second line you used the word "ditched" and I must admit that your usage of this word escapes me, (that is my way of saying "what do you mean" while tying to not sound to dumb about it :-) Great poem, I ma enjoying your work.

[Gee]

Ditched is dumped,got rid of......Thank you again

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is beautiful....and so opposite of the lyrics in the Beatles' song "Baby's in Black"

this goes in such positive, gentle, loving direction....being there for her with open arms and true love to bring her back to life.

[Gee]

Thanks Jacob,I'm flattered

[Ruth]

Such a delicate and tender piece, tearful and so beautifully poised...

[Gee]

Thank you..

[Beccy]

How lovely this is, and so beautifully written.

Such a poem would banish sorrow in an instant.


Beccy.

[Gee]

Thanks Beccy

[Bare trees]

This sounds very lyrical. Sad too, but an amazing job.



100/100

[Gee]

Cheers,very kind