Alive but not living.

Alive but not living.

A Poem by Gee
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Living after the death of a life-long love

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In armchair old his body slumped
beside the unlit fire,
in a rested state, serenaded by
that evenings crickets choir.

Old and weary, bathed and clean
fresh clothes against his skin,
a hearty meal he'd tiredly ate
lay heavy deep within.

His age lined face, sun baked and dry,
fatigued, tired eyes half shut,
a ribbon red on jaw line shaved
where carelessly he'd cut.

Strains of "their" song filled the air
a smile played 'cross his lips,
he pictured his wife of fifty years
as she was all breasts and hips.

A tear he wiped from parchment cheek
a tear of loss and love,
two years now since she left his arms
to wait for him above.

Two years alive not living
he wanted off life's ride,
ready now in prayer he'd asked
to be taken to her side.











© 2017 Gee


Author's Note

Gee
Might have tenses muddled,confuse myself at times

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This is very beautiful and I absolutely love it. When you talk of their song filling the air, that part really speaks to me, but the ending is just so perfect. I absolutely love the ending, truly undeniably amazing

Posted 9 Years Ago


Gee

9 Years Ago

Thanks for the kind review.
Stately, yet, utterly lovely.
There is an undeniable idealism, here, that, in no way, disputes reality.
Work to be admired, Gee.


Posted 9 Years Ago


Gee

9 Years Ago

Very kind.Thanks Frankie
Its really an awesome trait to write something other than autobiographical. You have done really a good work here. *god bless you*. looking forward to read more of your works.

~Sophy

Posted 9 Years Ago


Gee

9 Years Ago

Thanks Sophy
"He was ready now,in prayer he'd asked,
to be taken to her side,
two years alive, not living,
he wanted off life's ride. " ... Gee the entire poem was gorgeous - i have tiny suggestion - I would have loved to have read the second line in the stanza here as the finisher - its a showstopper of a line - a heartwrencher
:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Gee

9 Years Ago

Have made the tiny change.Suppose this one is subconsciously written from my point of view.No good m.. read more
when a dear one passes away an emotional feelings surrounds us.

i like these line most
He was ready now,in prayer he'd asked,
to be taken to her side,
two years alive, not living,
he wanted off life's ride.

nice poetry.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Gee

9 Years Ago

Thanks for a kind review bela
sometimes life muddles us - not the tenses at all.

How we deal with missing is what our lives become. You captured the gestalt very well.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Gee

9 Years Ago

"How we deal with missing is what our lives become" that alone is worthy of a poem and is so very tr.. read more

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Added on January 2, 2015
Last Updated on November 15, 2017
Tags: love, loss, life, death.

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Gee
Gee

Milton keynes, United Kingdom



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