Little Miss Muffet sat on her tuffet,
eating her curds and whey,
when along came a farmer,
a right rustic charmer,
who immediately wooed, made a play.
He plied her with wine,
"have more you'll be fine,"
before hiding his sausage inside,
then when he was done having his fun,
he left thanking her for the ride.
NOW.............
Pregnant Miss Muffet is having to rough it
'cos dads thrown her out on the street,
and the smooth rustic charmer who did this to harm her
has legged it, was quick on his feet.
So the moral of this is don't ever kiss
or open your legs 'cos you're flattered,
as with a kid on the way and nowhere to stay
your life could be properly shattered.
That's a great little piece of whimsy. It would be so much better if you arranged it in stanzas though.
Little Miss Muffet, sat on her tuffet,
Eating her curds and whey,
When along came a farmer, a right rustic charmer,
Who immediately wooed, made a play.
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Have just this moment finished reading one of your poems,brilliant.Haven't got a clue what a stanza .. read moreHave just this moment finished reading one of your poems,brilliant.Haven't got a clue what a stanza is,thought it was a German tank,but will take on board any comments,advice you can shovel my way.Thanks for reading.
9 Years Ago
Stanzas are groups of lines usually Gee mate - verses, we might call them too, as David kindly shows.. read moreStanzas are groups of lines usually Gee mate - verses, we might call them too, as David kindly shows an example (a 4 line group/stanza) - they aid the reader and make the work look good. Presentation is part of the whole package.
9 Years Ago
Cheers Anto.I suppose I should take more notice of the presentation,no good putting a t**d in an Ar.. read moreCheers Anto.I suppose I should take more notice of the presentation,no good putting a t**d in an Armani suit,wouldn't give the required effect.It's good that people like yourself actually offer advice and don't just read,think"that's shite"but then post a comment to massage the ego of the poet.Keep up the good work.
9 Years Ago
Thats a nice thing to say mate - Its hard to critique without fearing blowing out the flame Gee - bu.. read moreThats a nice thing to say mate - Its hard to critique without fearing blowing out the flame Gee - but we are all learning mate, if you want you can PM me and I'll show you some sites I use to learn.
9 Years Ago
Might well take you up on that in the future,depends on how frustrated I get with myself.With regard.. read moreMight well take you up on that in the future,depends on how frustrated I get with myself.With regards to reviewing I tend to shy away from speaking my mind because people very rarely want any negativity,constructive or not,whereas I'm at an age where it doesn't bother my arse.To use an extremely over used and seldom meant"Americanism",have a good day.
Nice to see you visit David lol keeping an eye on things lol:)
7 Years Ago
And, boys, if you go to too many learning sites, you are in danger of losing your originality! Gee, .. read moreAnd, boys, if you go to too many learning sites, you are in danger of losing your originality! Gee, I liked your poem just the way you wrote it!!!!!!
Love it. It's about time the classics were modernised for todays market. Little red riding hoodie, Jack and Jill going on the pill, Oh, I better stop now before they come take me away.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Right lets get on it, I've done Georgie Porgie and Humpty Dumpty, I'll have a go at Jack and Jill..... read moreRight lets get on it, I've done Georgie Porgie and Humpty Dumpty, I'll have a go at Jack and Jill.....thanks for reading, reviewing
Nice one Gee. reminds me ofwhat we thought of as the ruder version we sang in the playground as kids,
Little Miss Muffet,sat on her tuffet,
eating her curds and whey,
She put in her thumb, and pulled out a typewriter,
and said what the f**ks that doing in there? :)
Haha very cute..... and funny I must say!
Hmmmmmmmm........
I wonder what you could do with Little Red Riding Hood....
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thanks Melinda.Little Red Riding Hood,mmmmm now there's a thought....Reading your biog is very humbl.. read moreThanks Melinda.Little Red Riding Hood,mmmmm now there's a thought....Reading your biog is very humbling and I wish you all the best,I like everybody else in good health take it for granted when we should thank our lucky stars.
oh another great twist here. I really like this one..there is a strong message woven within the humor aimed at young girls, telling them to be carful otherwise this could be their reality!!
Very clever Gee!!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Hi Serrena,cheers,seems as though this was written years ago.I write and delete so much piffle I don.. read moreHi Serrena,cheers,seems as though this was written years ago.I write and delete so much piffle I don't know my arse from my elbow sometimes
9 Years Ago
well i am glad you re posted it and i got a chance to read it! G
Again thanks.I just keep things ad simple as possible,haven't got the greatest command of the good q.. read moreAgain thanks.I just keep things ad simple as possible,haven't got the greatest command of the good queen Lizzies English.
9 Years Ago
Not many of us do. King David below gave you a great piece of advice, though. If you haven't check.. read moreNot many of us do. King David below gave you a great piece of advice, though. If you haven't checked him out, you definitely should. He's the king of meter and rhyme. Thanks for sharing this one.
9 Years Ago
Yep have checked him out,a few divisions above me,something to aspire to.Thanks .Take care
That's a great little piece of whimsy. It would be so much better if you arranged it in stanzas though.
Little Miss Muffet, sat on her tuffet,
Eating her curds and whey,
When along came a farmer, a right rustic charmer,
Who immediately wooed, made a play.
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Have just this moment finished reading one of your poems,brilliant.Haven't got a clue what a stanza .. read moreHave just this moment finished reading one of your poems,brilliant.Haven't got a clue what a stanza is,thought it was a German tank,but will take on board any comments,advice you can shovel my way.Thanks for reading.
9 Years Ago
Stanzas are groups of lines usually Gee mate - verses, we might call them too, as David kindly shows.. read moreStanzas are groups of lines usually Gee mate - verses, we might call them too, as David kindly shows an example (a 4 line group/stanza) - they aid the reader and make the work look good. Presentation is part of the whole package.
9 Years Ago
Cheers Anto.I suppose I should take more notice of the presentation,no good putting a t**d in an Ar.. read moreCheers Anto.I suppose I should take more notice of the presentation,no good putting a t**d in an Armani suit,wouldn't give the required effect.It's good that people like yourself actually offer advice and don't just read,think"that's shite"but then post a comment to massage the ego of the poet.Keep up the good work.
9 Years Ago
Thats a nice thing to say mate - Its hard to critique without fearing blowing out the flame Gee - bu.. read moreThats a nice thing to say mate - Its hard to critique without fearing blowing out the flame Gee - but we are all learning mate, if you want you can PM me and I'll show you some sites I use to learn.
9 Years Ago
Might well take you up on that in the future,depends on how frustrated I get with myself.With regard.. read moreMight well take you up on that in the future,depends on how frustrated I get with myself.With regards to reviewing I tend to shy away from speaking my mind because people very rarely want any negativity,constructive or not,whereas I'm at an age where it doesn't bother my arse.To use an extremely over used and seldom meant"Americanism",have a good day.
Nice to see you visit David lol keeping an eye on things lol:)
7 Years Ago
And, boys, if you go to too many learning sites, you are in danger of losing your originality! Gee, .. read moreAnd, boys, if you go to too many learning sites, you are in danger of losing your originality! Gee, I liked your poem just the way you wrote it!!!!!!
Devoted family man and lover of life.
Simply written, easily understood "stuff" for those without code breaking skills. You will NEVER need Google to understand me:)
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