You know what i always say.....curiosity killed the bunny.....lol..just kiddin..maybe. this is a great poem. short , sweet, and straight to the point. *points at you with pen* Thats what i like about you, you get it done. (: now, lets eat sum of those french bread pizza sticks or whatever. (:
I have had lessons like that. I mostly promise myself about changing things for the better but it did not happen. I broke a promise. I try and try again I break another promise to myself
I really enjoyed this piece. I think you did an exquisite job on the rhyme and meter. And I loved the message behind it. I also like that this poem can be seen in two different lights, as a person who is learning from their mistakes or as a person who is chasing after a dream and they get set back or mess up.. BUT they need to keep on trying. So it can be viewed as both positive or negative, depending on the reader. I like that. Nicely written.
haha, i agree with tina kline! go ahead, get out there and chase after those dreams, who cares if you make mistakes! but a wonderful little poem nevertheless -- even if our worldviews seem to differ :)
WE BREAK ACROSS THESE TRAM LINES I DRAW
by Haz
I draw them with lines of reflections through their steps
enough space between them
for your space.. more..