A Place In The Sun

I drove through there once

I don’t remember why

But I remember the sunshine,

A café, a pub

I remember a river,

There were strawberries

There was cream

I remember we were laughing

We were in love -

Now they’re building a by-pass.

 

It’s just a memory, that day

Like all things, like all places

Like all people, all faces

I remember hers, it was smiling

In the sun, now it’s done.

We didn’t stop, we just laughed

We just looked and passed through

“We must remember this place”

I remember her face

In the sun, by the river

In love.

 

It’s a part of my life that’s gone, that day

And that place is my memory of her

It’s a curse to remember

It’s a curse to forget

It’s still there

Like a place in the sun.

 

We never went back there, you see, never once

We passed on, as we laughed, in the sun

It was probably noisy, with traffic and life

We never went back, never stopped, life goes on

And I don’t want to go there again.

“We don’t want that road passing through here no more

The noise, the traffic, always someone gets hurt”

They never knew about us, on that day, in the sun

Now they’re building a by-pass.

Reviews

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

I am such a romantic at heart that i have to like this..oh!..no i am not saying that this is syrupy mush mush sweet..this is good,blends in that feeling of nostalgia and love that never fades..(i don't think i am expressing it well)..but i have to say Devon i like this a lot.I like when you say I remember we were laughing
We were in love -
Now they’re building a by-pass.
It is amazing how we confine ourselves into a moment and say that is it..this is where we are,it can't get better,happier..well that is how it seems apparently in love,but life moves on very fast and there are moments waiting for us...only if we open our hearts and flow with time.
It’s a curse to remember

It’s a curse to forget

It’s still there..so much said in those few lines.
I also noticed how you have used sun in all the stanzas apart from her face and love that you remember so well,it could be an extended metaphor for how lucid and happy is this memory.
I love how you said
It was probably noisy, with traffic and life

We never went back, never stopped, life goes on

And I don’t want to go there again.

“We don’t want that road passing through here no more

The noise, the traffic, always someone gets hurt”

They never knew about us, on that day, in the sun

Now they’re building a by-pass.
I like the feeling of nostalgia that you have weaved in so well here.You hold your ground though and with bitter sweet acceptance agree that life moves on..:)

[Robyn]

this is such a beautiful poem...i can really relate to it, so it makes it even more enjoyable. always look back fondly on memories of former love.

great work with this

[Alicante lullaby]

life goes on...i just fell in love with the last stanza...shows one who is afraid to expose the agony trying to forget things...

[Truly Ross-Wisehart]

I see people milling about, treading on a place held dear...none of them the wiser. I think we all have such a place. I know that this reminded me of one such place. There is a supermarket there now. I still get that warm feeling, though, when I have occasion to drive passed. Mostly happy, a bit sad.

Another excellent contribution.

~True

[A.Lee]

This is good! I like the reflection in it and how the sun stands out in every stanza as a memorable point about that place. Your work is under-reviewed! You have a lot of talent.