Hey, Lover Boy

In a moment she was gone

walked out of my life

though she hadn't even really

walked in

she caught my eye

and I caught hers

a flicker of recognition

but as she strode past

alas, so I held my position

She was everything I wanted

without ever knowing it

though recalling her face

is a blur

the way she dressed

moved and stepped

and the fall of her hair

in a soul-gasping moment

a glimpse of a stare

But the timing was wrong

the situation awkward

a stranger's eyes

in a crowded room

no convention works

that makes magic live

it cannot be done

that behaviour won't do

so sit and stay seated, my son

It should have been a movie

an outrageous scene

a sudden explsosion

of impossible music

all sound, all dance

a cast of everyone

jump up and join-in

me standing on a table

she laughs and I sing

But life isn't like that

and I dance in my room

ecstatically alone

imagining it's happening

but I can't impose a scene

on accepted reality

for it didn't write the song

and cannot say the words

it seems it's just the dream that is wrong

Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

Life isn't a movie, indeed. You have so brilliantly captured that feeling of looking at someone who you know is the one for you. But the jubilation that normally accompanies such a moment in the movies does not always occur in life, and the soul crushes when you see her walk away, knowing that you might never see her again.

" It should have been a movie

an outrageous scene

a sudden explsosion

of impossible music

all sound, all dance

a cast of everyone

jump up and join-in

me standing on a table

she laughs and I sing"
That verse alone conjures everything one can expect to find in movies, and it is a treat to the senses. The way you continue so matter-of-factly with "But life isn't like that" is beautiful. Brilliant, my friend!

[Devons]

You are artistic gratification personified, my friend. Thank you deeply.
You know, this sort of thing happens to me almost every day!

[JayceeC]

If life were like romantic movies we'd all rush in. There'd be ling looks, soft smiles and slow hands moving along arms in a caress as we dance. We would never hesitate to talk with a stranger, and our hearts would never break into unglueable pieces.
But life is not that way. You capture this moment, this memory with the lens of a Hollywood camera, but ground it in the pragmatism of the heartland. This was a good read. Particularly liked your ending strophe.

[Devons]

"strophe" - now that's a word you don't hear every day. German, apparently?
A sweeping bow of gratitude, JCC.

[JayceeC]

I was definitely writing them before I knew their name. :-)

[Devons]

I'm still like that even with the English language!

[Cladine]

I'm really moved by this! You captured every single moment of her ,admiring her beauty ,make a beautiful scene where you are together,but just come into reality and boom life is not like the movies at all. :)

[Devons]

Thank you deeply. It's gratifying to imagine i can provoke such feelings. Blessings be upon you!

[kyam]

You are just AMAZING! Your writing is sensational!! I'm so taken aback and entertained and have feelings and I am also in the poem at the same time. Tremendously Written, Bravo, Bravo!!!!!

[Devons]

Really? Are you the girl?
Thank you, thank you, thank you muchly.

[kyam]

Absolutely! Nothing that you don't deserve honey! I'm just astonished by your writing, and please wait until I catch my breath, just thinking about your writing does that to me, You Are Great!

[Devons]

Please! My head and other things will get too big!

[Gee]

Sweet,could imagine this being a voice over in an old black and white movie with a single bloke at a bar contemplating on what could/should have been.....a gifted man you are Devons

[Devons]

You are too kind, sir. Thank you.
Apart from not being in black and white, I think I am that bloke at the bar.