I wrote this for my dearest and was too embarrassed to send it to her. Instead I entered the poem into a competition........see below (in the note for reviewers what was said).
Melting into the luscious grass,
Cool air breezing lightly,
Refreshing senses.
Turning to say tender words,
Realising you are not there,
Instead alive in my thoughts,
I say them anyway,
To a buttercup,
All alone.
One flower,
A wish for hope,
Blowing a kiss
Up to the fluffy white clouds
Travelling the skies,
Believing in my heart
Dreams come true,
And one day,
I will be with you.
'Before going any further, Gary, let me make one thing clear.....your poem was selected for publication, and as a contest semi-finalist, on the basis of your unique talent and artistic vision'......Now send some money and see your poem transform into a 'classic, coffee-table quality hardbound volume - printed in two colours on fine-milled paper specifically selected to last for generations'. At this point I laughed rather a lot but thought everyone here should be aware at how easy it is to get taken in by offers that paint you as a wonderful writer!
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Faint heart never won fair lady She would have truly appreciated your words
Every one who enters these contests is a winner Most of us have been taken at some time
I know I certainly was.You are a wiser man now and realise if you post in the cafe you will get an honest feedback from those who have no axe to grind
A pleasant write to read ,well chosen words in poetic prose but I am certain she would have found much more to praise than I do
This poem was very sweet, simple, and beautiful. You have the William Wordsworth thing, crossed with the William Blake thing, crossed with the Lord Tennyson thing. I think you understand nature and love mixing, and this is how it turns out. I wish everyone could be as alluring and captivating as this writing is. Please keep up the good work, I really enjoyed this piece
A beautiful, luscious poem that I hope you did finally pass on to your loved one as the words must be appreciated. As for the other, it sounds like poetry.com to me...they are infamous for that sort of thing. Your words are wonderful and should be printed for free as they are here for all to enjoy.
Light,
Siddartha