Buttercup

I wrote this for my dearest and was too embarrassed to send it to her. Instead I entered the poem into a competition........see below (in the note for reviewers what was said).

Melting into the luscious grass,
Cool air breezing lightly,
Refreshing senses.
Turning to say tender words,
Realising you are not there,
Instead alive in my thoughts,
I say them anyway,
To a buttercup,
All alone.
One flower,
A wish for hope,
Blowing a kiss
Up to the fluffy white clouds
Travelling the skies,
Believing in my heart
Dreams come true,
And one day,
I will be with you.

Author's Note

'Before going any further, Gary, let me make one thing clear.....your poem was selected for publication, and as a contest semi-finalist, on the basis of your unique talent and artistic vision'......Now send some money and see your poem transform into a 'classic, coffee-table quality hardbound volume - printed in two colours on fine-milled paper specifically selected to last for generations'. At this point I laughed rather a lot but thought everyone here should be aware at how easy it is to get taken in by offers that paint you as a wonderful writer!

Reviews

[Poeticpiers]

Faint heart never won fair lady She would have truly appreciated your words
Every one who enters these contests is a winner Most of us have been taken at some time
I know I certainly was.You are a wiser man now and realise if you post in the cafe you will get an honest feedback from those who have no axe to grind

A pleasant write to read ,well chosen words in poetic prose but I am certain she would have found much more to praise than I do

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This is a gem of a poem, they should pay you to allow them the privilege of printing it in their anthology.

[Drea]

What a lovely piece for your sweetheart.
It sounds she has gone away someplace where you would have worry of her return. A long distance love perhaps or a secret one? I do hope that you sent it to her eventually. It would be a shame for such a beautiful sentiment whispered in the wind not to be whispered in her ear.

[Leah Simone]

I really enjoyed the image of you saying tender words to the buttercup - in her absence - it was an original, simple, yet touching moment and this delicate poem oozes with tenderness. I'm sure your dearest would treasure this and I hope you have shared it with her.

[~Wandering Soul~]

the poem is beautiful and so full of image.....
it beautiful and then take s a turn...while still beutiful it is also sad at the end....yet accepting
i loved it it really is amaing
thanks for sharing
xxx

[Jenny Davis]

Awww...this is as tender as a flower ;) I really loved the wispy feel to this, Gary :)
Well done!

[Lisa Hoffman]

What can I say? It startsout tender Then gentle saddness, making the heart break. Thank you for sharing. I do have a question though. Is there a real person behind this poem?

[Carole]

Another tranquil write, Gary. Flows with perfect ease. Sort of picture you on the beach of one of the Hawaiian Islands reciting this to your love. How utterly gorgeous. Hope your dream comes true. Also, I had a good laugh reading the author's note...:-)

[Deborah Shepard]

quite beautiful

[J.P.O.et]

Ah, I like this one
the 'melting', 'turning', 'realising', 'traveling' and 'believing'
had me yearning for my own true love.
Truly enjoyed, and your warning is noted
Thanx
J.P.O.et

[Joseph - Michael]

That was very simple writing, yet it's very meanful as well. I'm not sure about "Buttercup" Don't ask why, but I'm thinking about peanut butter cup and I just love that damn candy (lol) Sorry, don't mind me, I'm mental

Anyway, it's a well written piece you got there and you still never cease to amaze me, so it's all still good...