Colour me in Kisses

Crimson lines drip down endlessly
Outside a body, inside I WANT to feel you.
Let me open a door
Open until I can see
Understand the struggle you fight
Realise your pain, release your heart.

My world is yours
Emotions affected by the cut.

Incision of that blade hurts me too
Not seen or felt by you.

Knives dig into my body
I let them, want them.
Spurting blood sees demons laugh
Sensing relief when life has no reason.
Enticing I will cry - 'come with me now'
Showering you forever in affection, care and love.

Reviews

[R J Askew]

I'm uncomfortable about blood so I can't focus too well on this. But these two lines catch my eye "Incision of that blade hurts me too" and "Knives dig into my body" ... in fact I read them before I read the first line. Thinking about this as far as I can, it is a loving plea couched in the language of the cutter to try and find another way. Strong, bold poem.

[MeiAngelus]

I'm not sure if you know what the knife feels like from personal experience. I don't like to make assumptions. Personally, I do. This piece tears my heart in two for my "love" of cutting and love of others. To me, it says the knife is the only one who kisses these days. Then again, it's all in perception my dear. Anyway, I love this. Feel free to talk to me anytime. I'd love some tips from you.

[Fear Corrupts!]

I love your writing..

[Natasha Ashway]

Crimson lines drip down endlessly
Outside a body, inside I WANT to feel you.
Let me open a door
Open until I can see
Understand the struggle you fight
Realise your pain, release your heart.

My world is yours
Emotions affected by the cut....

I feel intense emotion.
People say the phrase 'pain and pleasure', and this comes across to me like 'pain and possession.'
Stronger. Dangerously strong.
It's deep.... deep as the cuts your words and imagery emphasize.

I enjoyed the concepts, pondering.

Thanks for sharing, Gary!!!

[Dawn]

Aww. This is so good. he allows himself to feel her pain. thats true love.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A wonderful acrostic! Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Leah]

hmm.. i'm trying to figure you out. to decipher what you really are.
would you tell me??

[Mistral Bilgera]

Gotta love this acrostic! =) a love bordering on passion and hysteria... amazing elements (especially for the emo kids in all of us)

[Jessi]

This is a great write. I love it thanks for share it

[Pj]

Very visual, but just as Orlando, I am uncomfortable with blood...it makes me queesy. Lol. It is a great write though. I usually saw acrostics as inferior to other types of writing...but you have changed my mind! Awesome!

[TL Boehm]

love and death inextricably tied. Well written, visceral poetry here.