All for nothing

All for nothing

A Poem by Gazza
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Just a short piece, tears from a broken heart...

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Couldn’t you see how much I loved you?

 

I thought about you always

In everything I did, I put you first

I gave me to you in all ways

I gave you water, to quench your thirst

 

I thought of you before I made any decision

Just to check how it would affect you

If a razor makes a cut,u made an incision

Every time I spoke to you I stayed true

 

Every where I went I had you

To me you were not one, you were all

If my heart was a kingdom you would rule

Without a ruler any kingdom would fall

 

All you ever asked of me I gave

I passed the city and a mansion

I chose to stay in a cave

All in the name of compassion

 

 

All along I thought it was a noble sacrifice

Now I’m beginning to doubt it

If what I gave was a thousand grains of rice

What I got in return was a ton of s**t

© 2012 Gazza


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Your poem emotionally portrays a common source of heartache, namely, broken commitments and promises. When we open wide our hearts to someone we take a chance of experience real hurt. Your writing expresses this.

Posted 12 Years Ago


"If what I gave was a thousand grains of rice
What I got in return was a ton of s**t"
I like the poem. A real life ending to a excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


The ending was interesting, but to the point :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Gazza

12 Years Ago

Thank you
Although it was a sad and meaningful poem, I have to admit that I laughed a bit at the end. Good job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Gazza

12 Years Ago

Thank you, i'm wondering what exactly made you laugh.
Very good. You can tell your pain. But my only criticism would be to check the flow of this.
Iike "every time I spoke to you I stayed true" it seems a little long. Maybe change it to "everytime we spoke, I stayed true."
We'll, that's only my idea, and you totally can think its awful cause I am fairly new at writing poetry :) anyway, it's obvious you have talent. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Gazza

12 Years Ago

Lol thank you for taking time to read and advise, you can never know enough so i'll always appreciat.. read more
SmileBig :)

12 Years Ago

Anytime :)
Heart felt

Posted 12 Years Ago


I can relate very nicely! Great job

Posted 12 Years Ago


Gazza

12 Years Ago

thanks
Beautiful I hope to read alot more stuff like this

Posted 12 Years Ago


Gazza

12 Years Ago

You will you will, thanks
This poem is beautiful!
100/100

Posted 12 Years Ago


Gazza

12 Years Ago

Thank you
Unrequited love is the worst kind of love. I do say, you have talent; it just needs polishing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Gazza

12 Years Ago

That's encouraging, will work at becoming better every day.

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