What did we give up?

Do you ever wonder?

Did those branches in the days of Adam have thorns? From what would they need protection? And did those branches reach down gracefully in the sight of Adam to deliver it's sweetest fruit to that perfect Image of God? Did he, Adam, a prince given everything, who named the creatures of the earth, ever envy the single fruit denied to him?

With what amount of grace did the serpent roam before it was cursed to crawl on it's belly? How kind was the lion before he became proud and ate his brother en?

Is there anything left of that place? Are there still fruits that resemble those from The Garden? What colors did He take away from the land?

Author's Note

Do you ever cry over such wonders as I do?

Reviews

[TamiViolet]

Personally, I believe that the story of Adam and Eve is intended to be symbolic in nature as well as the serpent... But I enjoyed this very much and it certainly arouses mystery and curiosity...

You force the reader to think both critically and creatively... A sure sign of excellent art. Wonderful flow, too.

[Jenny Nelson]

Very interesting questions posed here. Definitely thought provking. Well chosen words. Nicely done.

[Brette Medb]

There are always more questions than answers but I also agree with Apollonia, I believe the story of Adam and Eve is more symbolic than literal. This made the reader pay attention and I liked that.

[Phibby Venable]

you have a wonderful mind..i believe the symbolic snakes are always here, as
are those reaching for perfection. great work.

[Tommy]

"Is there anything left of that place? Are there still fruits that resemble those from The Garden? What colors did He take away from the land?"
Very thought provoking indeed!
One day we shall get an answer to all of your question; I do believe.
Nice work!
RLG,
Tommy

[Jasmarine]

Hmm, makes you think about how we're destroying our world. How our kind is selfish by nature and doensn't think about the consequences. But also, its how we're sheltered as children from the world around us in an effort to protect our innocence. When we see the things around us as we get older, we want to be doing those deeds to try and fit in. Just like the forbidden fruit, we're not allowed to touch it, only look but at our own stupidity do we curse ourselves.

[Kimmi]

As most others have said, this poem is definitely thought provoking and sparks curiosity. You did a good job in making a reader actually stop and think about things.
It was honestly wonderful to read. One of my favorite parts had to be about the serpent, "With what amount of grace did the serpent roam before it was cursed to crawl on it's belly?" It truly makes you wonder.

[The Tea Party Mouse.]

Very thought provoking. I often wonder, too, what life could be like where it a paradise. Life without pain and nothing but beauty, but we'll never know. :/

Great work.

[ebur™]

Hmm, this poem really makes me think, with all the question you tied in here, each one makes me stop and wonder for just a bit. I really love pieces that can make me do that, it makes it worthwhile to read. I enjoyed this very much, keep it up.

[Dusty]

Wow... I have always wondered the same about Adam and Eve, but would never been able to voice it as you have... Very thought-provoking... Great write!

[Lydia]

This is pretty cool. It gives a different perspective on the story for sure. I especially like the cursed serpent bit.