Inanimate Object

I wrote this to enter a contest. The Inanimate Object contest... =)

Oh hidden Object I can't describe

You give me life, you help me die.

You throw me out and hold me in.

You heal the scars of my own sin.

 

I seek you out in burning pages

Certain You will pay my wages.

Your ways are not the same as mine;

No flesh can see the true Divine.

 

I cry to You when I am weak

Your promised honey is so sweet.

I tear Your heart and make it bleed

Yet in Your Grace I still do feed.

 

Your screaming children do have Faith

So pray I do for our own sake.

Us selfish beings, to You we lie

And thus we suffer, and we die.

Author's Note

God.

Reviews

[Keli Renee]

I thought this was very good.
As for Dusty, and her remark about the 6th line, I think I know what you are referring to:
"For the wages of sin is Death..."
[I certainly hope I was correct on that]
Your writing is amazing enough to get ME, an Agnostic Theist to appreciate it.
Very well done, sir.
I hope you win.

-Keli Rene

[Lindsay]

I really liked this, though I think you can do without the rhyming. Very good.

[heido]

Your screaming children do have Faith


I like this.
Kinda makes me wonder if above the horrors of the world, the things that make us loud with grief, the things that make noise of our souls, can be quieted by our faith.

[Stacey Watts]

I like this piece. Very well written and thought provoking. Nice job.

[A Touch of Insanity:)]

It was very powerful. Nice write! See, no need for puppy eyes XD

[Michael X]

esxcellent effort in understanding and these lines create the
eternal stuggle envisioned

I tear Your heart and make it bleed
Yet in Your Grace I still do feed.

as what lead up to and follows invent the paradox of mankind based on a spiritual perception of a religious design. absolutely nice job.

[Red Brick Keshner]

Divine paradox it sounds like.... the poem just points toward the ultimate animate Creator and Covenant keeping God. Powerful write.

[Hello, Goodbye]

The spirituality is very pronounced, in a striking way. Its a very interesting read, indeed.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poor God in heaven. Give us free will and we screw it up. We cry to him like he is to blame. I like this poem. Story and words bought me in. Held my attention. You did what a writer would want. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Emily Quinn]

this is very interesting, I like the way you chose to express your personal beleifs and the contrast was very unique and showed both sides of beleif. I do agree with both other reveiwers about the sixth line, your intentions were good it just seems to not fit in with the flow and feel of the rest of the poem. Very well done though. coming from an athiest!