Let me take you on a journey...

Let me take you on a journey…

Walk, now, into the clear painted ceiling. There's a sky waiting for you. The stars shine brighter above you as you feel your body start to reduce. You're not moving towards them; the sky is coming to you. You feel the distant consumptions as though they are right before you. The air enters your lungs without inhaling. It flows through your skin without breaking. You see colors that have never existed, from objects that haven’t been born. You hear noises that feed you a language, spoken by lips with an unbroken seal. Your thoughts stretch farther than limitless. You are something you've been before.

Author's Note

What promoted me? Dreams, prayers, knowledge. It is my attempt to capture those moments when I have them.

Reviews

[Hello, Goodbye]

I like the 'reader involvement' that you use.. it feels personal. I think that if you push yourself a bit more with the limits of the description.. that could push this to even greater heights. I mean its good what you have, but I feel you have even more of the story to tell..

Good job with the atmospheric notions..

[Tori]

Wow this is really really deep with emotion in just a few words! Love it!

[Emily Quinn]

great imagery and imaginative description. I liked the comparissons you chose to enhance the overall feeling, it does feel a little incomplete though, but great job

[Jasmarine]

It reminds me of the view children have on the world around them and how they perceive things. They knew there's a bigger picture out there but they don't know the exact mass of it, can only picture what it's like. I love this.

[Kimmi]

The imagery was quite powerful. It made you feel it.
And the fact that you so heavily involve the reader is something wonderful.

[Dusty]

Wow.. I like the direct addressment to the reader, nice choice... I could really picture this, though I have no clue where it is, lol. Nice work! :)

[Lydia]

Hallucinogens. I like it.

[Eternally Elemental]

Nice way with how you include the reader. Scene by scene and flash by flash the reader is inside this piece. I liked this description of a higher state. My favorite part of it has to be seeing colors you have never seen before. It really plays with the mind.

"You are something you've been before." Interesting line. May I ask what you mean by it?

Very good write, you have a developed style in your writing.

[Lindsay]

I absolutely love this. I love your style. It's so original. You have a definite voice. Seriously, keep it up!

[Dancing Butterfly]

i like this one it reminds me when I use to do different kinds of meditations before i became a christian. i would try to relief my stress through visualization and focus.

[Iota]

This one did remind me of a spiritual poem, especially like the part of us not moving but the the sky moving to us, that would have been some experience to whitness. You had some descriptive images that were unique and therefore gave me the sense of this being spiritual. Good Write.