Tears of a Frozen Paradise

Watch them, fear them, never touch them;
The screaming crystals reaching backwards
The timeless rivers flow anointed.
Confused, misguided, helpless believers;
Chasing never ending gospels.
And while time yields not a strict obedience
Till that crimson flower blossoms
And the horizon paints a living fire.

 

Author's Note

Icicles, and how they are demons.

Reviews

[TamiViolet]

You cradle the reader in passion, and I'm particularly drawn to the multiple connotations... I say, it's quite amazing that such power can merge from so few words...

'Till that crimson flower blooms
And the horizon paints a living fire'

I see so much more than icicles, whether or not deliberate, your tapestry is selective and a brilliant means of conveying fire and ice in its most symbolic form...

[Dusty]

Wow... amazing... I'll never look at an icicle the same again.. You truly have a way with words! Keep on writing! :)

[Keevan]

beautiful. I really liked it. Nice write.

[Taylor H.]

beautiful. and great use of personification.

[Perdition]

Gotta love the Spring and the drape of it's followers. I loved the way you turned this into a demon...they stop the river's heart and hang in unique prisons.

[Eternally Elemental]

Amazing.

To think on all those icicles burning with that flaming horizon. The tears of that frozen paradise will vanish with a burning wave. I liked the imagery a lot and the representation creates a beautiful picture.
Although it is kind of strange to think of demons as icicles. For one reason that is hard for me to settle on; when they melt they turn to water. What then? What does it mean for them to melt? A little vague, but overall bursting with inspired flavor.

[Dev]

The imagery is vivid and I loved reading this. "Tears of a frozen paradise" , the heading itself speaks volumes !! Very well written !!!!

[Charles]

You did a good job on this one; the last two lines are a wonderful description of a sunrise that surely will threaten those evil icicles. I never thought of icicles as screaming crystals or thought of them as draping believers, but will from now on. I'm not sure I fully comprehend 'the timeless river flows anointed' but maybe re-reading in a couple of days will clarify things. Good writing.

[Saturn's Lover]

Wow, lovely imagery. Reminds me of this poster i had as a child. It was an angel standing on clouds and gold marble steps up to heaven... The verse i just can't remember, it wasn't in English... Gonna drive me crazy till i remember it now. I love the metaphors you use in this poem as well.

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

very beautiful And Very strong yet very Twisted in a way as in Evil part u explain in the poem But very deep i love it