Tears of a Frozen Paradise

Watch them, fear them, never touch them;
The screaming crystals reaching backwards
The timeless rivers flow anointed.
Confused, misguided, helpless believers;
Chasing never ending gospels.
And while time yields not a strict obedience
Till that crimson flower blossoms
And the horizon paints a living fire.

 

Author's Note

Icicles, and how they are demons.

Reviews

[TamiViolet]

You cradle the reader in passion, and I'm particularly drawn to the multiple connotations... I say, it's quite amazing that such power can merge from so few words...

'Till that crimson flower blooms
And the horizon paints a living fire'

I see so much more than icicles, whether or not deliberate, your tapestry is selective and a brilliant means of conveying fire and ice in its most symbolic form...

[Brette Medb]

Never quite thought of them that way. I liked this a lot. Definitely unique.

[Phibby Venable]

unique view! wonderful photo too.

[ChristianM]

I'm not going to pretend I understood any of that. Perhaps that's what good poetry is. I did just wake up though.
Nice job

[Jasmarine]

Wow. That was deep. I'm quite intrigued on your take of icicles. Loved it.

[Emily]

Very nice piece here. You've captured the barren uncharted aspects to the picture below the poem. I have read a group of your work and like the way you interweave pictures with your writing. I do believe that your writing is powerful enough not to have that be a necessity, but a simple and nice addition to the work.
This piece is a little disorganized. I don't get a very clear sense of what you're trying to say with the metaphors you've chosen. The first few lines are very good and very powerful, but i feel as though it yeilds a little of the intensity in the middle.
That being said, it regains its intensity at the last line. Interesting, no, how fire can destroy (theoretically) both demons and icicles.

Very nice use of imagery to portray your subject matter.

[Kimmi]

Nicely done. I like how you can pick things like icicles etc. and turn it into poetry. It really makes me smile. Wonderful read.

[PaperHearts]

Ha. Very interesting indeed! Beautiful wording, creating beautiful imagery! I especially loved the last line! The inserted picture was a nice way to set the tone of the poem too. The majestic title matched the majestic atmosphere of this piece. :D
~PaperHearts

[The Tea Party Mouse.]

I never would have thought of icicles as demons. O.o But I like the imagry used.

[Sasha]

Excellent work. The way you've transformed an icicle into a full fledged poem.

[Emily Quinn]

great way to take something so ordinary and transform it into the extraordinary. very great imagination