Tears of a Frozen Paradise

Watch them, fear them, never touch them;
The screaming crystals reaching backwards
The timeless rivers flow anointed.
Confused, misguided, helpless believers;
Chasing never ending gospels.
And while time yields not a strict obedience
Till that crimson flower blossoms
And the horizon paints a living fire.

 

Author's Note

Icicles, and how they are demons.

Reviews

[TamiViolet]

You cradle the reader in passion, and I'm particularly drawn to the multiple connotations... I say, it's quite amazing that such power can merge from so few words...

'Till that crimson flower blooms
And the horizon paints a living fire'

I see so much more than icicles, whether or not deliberate, your tapestry is selective and a brilliant means of conveying fire and ice in its most symbolic form...

[The Perfectionist]

I must admit, if you hadn't said what this was about, I would have had little to no clue. Your metaphor is...stretched to say the least, but for however difficult a spin it is to put on it, you manage it well. I should not be surprised, I suppose, since most of your work appears to be metaphorical.

One thing...compared to the shortness of the poem, the picture is a little...big. Very distracting. Maybe not the greatest idea.

[LisetteCanWrite!]

A very interesting and different view on icicles.. here portrayed as demons.. yet the beauty is immeasurable when the sunlight shines off their draping crystal forms.. much like a thorn to a rose.. they can pierce and cause damage. There are so many other metaphors here.. towards religion.. life.. choices.. this made a reader think!

[Bud]

Beautiful picture. Yes, I can see the comparison. At times, though those very same icicles provide to quench a dehydrated thirst...

[Dancing Butterfly]

kool i like that poem it is lovely

[shanise]

interesting read, brilliant write, and very intriguing!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very intriguing piece... it certainly does make you think... very creative.

[A Touch of Insanity:)]

I actually had to re-read it a few times to capture all the meanings... Very nice! :)

[Tamz]

Wow, the choice of words are really amazing, strong.
Love your poem!

[Stacey Watts]

Very well done the metaphors are very well written. Excellent job.