A Woman who Loved

a love story

'Why did i fall for you?'

- asked a woman who only loved

a guy who fought for a nation

and upon getting retired

got immersed in alcohol

'Why don't i feel anything, dear?'

- asked the guy who desperately tried to love

but failed miserably each time,

instead he adored sadness 

and lived in regret as he witnessed civilians

who prospered in money, greed and lust

'Why don't you instead focus on me, and beauty, love?'

- asked the woman who could not see him failing

in spirit and soul,

she reached out to him in dark 

to make him see a tiny bit of light

but she knew that there was no life left

so she loved unconditionally

to the man she always loved

and worshiped lords to grant him death

if life is not he is after

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

A man broken in spirit after the trauma of warfare. Only his wife would see the suffering he was enduring. To wish him death to end his suffering, tells me how much she loves him. She would suffer hugely herself for his sweet release. from pain. I guess this would be relatable to many who have a veteran in the family suffering from ptsd. Beautifully composed and heartfelt.

Chris

[Gaurav]

Thank you Chris for your beautiful review.

[Chris Shaw]

You are most welcome.

[Anushka joshi]

Amazing !! Amazing visualization I felt in this poem .
Two different personalities,but both of them needs love....
Lovely piece .... Treat to read it ....

[Gaurav]

thank you for your kind words

[barleygirl]

This is some of the most unique writing I've read in a long time. I love how you set this up with just one short line of dialogue for each verse, followed by a long description of where this person is coming from -- a technique one might think would be clunky, but it's done so well, it kinda takes my breath away. You give just enuf for us to get a fulsome picture of what's going on between these two & it summons so much more which the reader may have experienced in life, since everyone knows someone who lost his/her spirit after being in war.

The final verse is a little stunning, since granting a loved one the right to want to escape from a tortured life is not something most people would say, even if they might secretly think it. I love writing that addresses the elephant in the room, so I applaud you for your blunt honesty in the last verse. Happy new year! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Ruth]

Incredibly powerful piece Gaurav...sometimes love is not plain sailing and the tides immerse throughout the process. We can only love someone, not save them I believe, we can however have moments of raising their steps while we patiently wait to lovingly catch them in their falls also...very emotionally moving poem :)

[Gaurav]

Thanks a lot Ruth

[Lia Columbus]

Sometimes life just disappoints and love with all its might and power desperately tries to draw the man back to its beauty. But sometimes the pieces are too finely fringed to record. That's when we say all our strings broke. I like your work. It's simple and enriched with feelings
Lia

[Gaurav]

thanks a lot for your descriptive review :)

[Lacey Sue]

I still feel this poem every word in it just reminds me.

[Gaurav]

everyone of us has gone through it..dont worry

[Lacey Sue]

I'm sorry I'm just a lot right now

[Gaurav]

don't be...this phase will not stay long..like other phases

[Lacey Sue]

I hope not

[Lacey Sue]

Very much relate and ask myself that because my stupid ex who never stayed

[Gaurav]

thank you for your words...love is a parcel of happy and sad moment :)

[Lacey Sue]

Touche touche it is a very touchy subject, but it's so admiring also.

[Gaurav]

i know..it holds no truth for sure

[Lacey Sue]

Yeah it's hard to believe and trust anyone these days when it comes to love because knows the true meaning behind it they're only focusing on s3x and other stuff and not the romance behind it.

[Gaurav]

yes patience is the key in it...believe that there will be light of course

[Lacey Sue]

Yeah I had a whole argument with a dude because of what love meant he said it meant s3x and other stuff

[Gaurav]

he might have wrong interpretation of it..he will get to know dont worry

[Lacey Sue]

I hope so or he's going to get emotionally and mentally hurt

[Gaurav]

true that..

[Lacey Sue]

Sorry if I'm tryna have a convo I've been out of it lately and I'm a disaster at this point tbh.

[Gaurav]

its okay..wait for good times..and enjoy the life

[Lacey Sue]

I've only had a few good times with my dad because my mom was busy on drugs and left when I was born

[Gaurav]

life is nothing but made of sweet memories..cherish it

[Lacey Sue]

I try and I'll keep trying I'm not giving up I'm not the type to just walk away and give up

[John the Baptist]

PTSD lives on long after the events that caused it. Perhaps unconditional love could hope for merciful death for one lost deep in suffering.

[Gaurav]

Thank you John...yes you have written the truth

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love this read...unconditional love loves for the heart, for the insides of the other, not for monetary worth, or achievements...we are not judged in the end for what we have or what we have amassed in rewards...it is the kindness and love within us...and sometimes we just cannot see that.
j.

[Gaurav]

Thank you J for understanding...