A train called Death

will leave it all to accomplish me

I will meet you AFTER

in a place called I DON'T KNOW

some abrupt ending of foolish life

and i will enjoy it to the fullest,

yes doesn't matter how it ends

best thing is that it ends..

I will see you THERE

in a moment called BEYOND TIME

mountains where will touch seven skies

all flowing like a simple life

no one knows the fact here

no one will know the illusion there

I will hug you IN PEACE

in a home called THE TREE OF LIFE

fruits of love and their sweetness

we will realize the purity of it all

only thing in force will be the surrender

to something

I will leave you SMILING

in a train called DEATH

Reviews

[Onlyme]

This is simply beautiful and gives you peace and calm in know. The afterlife once death comes. Spirituality is an amazing comfort.

[Gaurav]

Thank you :)

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

to me this is so pure and beautiful
i love it words actuallyl escape me
its how i feel too really do
this is wonderful i am glad i discovered your writing very spiritual indeed

[Gaurav]

Death has a very special effect on my thinking..i am intrigued by the fact that death happens..i dont know about after-life but death is what makes life worth..Thank you so much for reading it :)

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

i like to think of death is like being born again but into a different realm that we havent been to yet

[Gaurav]

like another dimension...i would love to explore..where i can see some more colours not bound by my vision and can go to my past haha

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

im not sc ared really of death just scared sor my family in case they may miss me and be upset and i will miss them terribly that is all.

[Gaurav]

That's the power of unconditional love...death has no effect on it..truly said.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

i also llike to think of it like when we fall asleep and dream and we feel like when we are in a deep deep dream feel we have travelled to that other dimension which is possible also
sometimes i dream and feel like ive talked to my past on relatives or they have visited me in my dream. very comforting.

[Gaurav]

Yes dream is another phenomenon altogether..No one knows why happens what happens there..but then it is a relief to dream because you are on an adventure...

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

talking of sleep i should get some take care and thanks for the lovely talk really :) take care happy writing

[Gaurav]

You too..yes happy writing :) thank you!

[LazerRays]

Well herm, this is a beautiful poem. I imagined heaven in my head. A perfect picture painted with grace.
At the end, I won't lie, I tried to take the uppercase words and scramble them around to see if they would make a secret code...
Good job :)

[Gaurav]

Ohh yes i should try it sometimes...i do it with dreams -- once i composed a song in dream and once i got across 3-4 numbers and added it to get my street address :)

[LazerRays]

That's pretty cool. I had a dream I was falling and I looked up and saw Greek letters in the sky. The word was a curse i had learned that day, but I found it interesting that Greek words were appearing in my dreams

[Gaurav]

You are literally the connection between modern and ancient Greek culture..go for it Art..follow your Godness

[LazerRays]

Ahaha, thank you ;)

[Sneh]

You have ended every aspect with beautiful description. Good job, I liked it :)

[Gaurav]

Thank you Sneha. Appreciate your positive words :)

[LKBillips]

Hauntingly beautiful and full of hope for the afterlife as opposed to dread. Really beautiful poem.

[Gaurav]

Thank you for reviewing the work. Glad that you liked it :)

[barleygirl]

I love this poem. So many times poems about death are so serious. I love the way you make this playful & even flippant, like there's no respect for death, like death is just another party we can't wait to go to! It's completely UNrealistic to expect those left behind to be able to embrace such a message as this becuz we are conditioned to be miserable upon death. That's why I love your poem, becuz you buck the norms. You present a new way to cope with death. You paint death like a place I wish I could go too! *smile* Fondly, Margie

[Gaurav]

I know. I once had a strange experience of a feeling that allowed me to surrender everything to the air - even the fear of losing myself in some jungle and not be able to go back to my parents. Perhaps it was the near death experience. I dont know. But it was the beautiful feeling - to surrender it all - every worry, anger, feeling, desire and here i am waiting to pass it on to something again..thank you Margie..appreciate your thoughts :)

[Fran Marie]

This is such a mystical and magical write for me..reminds me
Of the bible verse. " o death where is thy sting"
it has no sting if we are really ready and anticipating riding the train of death

Nice Work..

[Gaurav]

Ohh thanks a ton for liking it. It is such a taboo topic.

[Fran Marie]

You're welcome and yes it is..

[Light and ashes]

In my opinion, this is genius.

[Gaurav]

Thank you so much :)

[Light and ashes]

No problem :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Loved the repitition of lines 'in place called' very creative poem.

[Gaurav]

Thank you for the review :)

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.