Never will i die in peace

A brief account of dreadful dream that i will not be able to find my identity

Blushing symptoms of flying flowers

fall upon my dying soul,

never will i see such colors

never will i die in peace...

Fly, high above the highest

beneath the cosmos of sea-less place,

the dream of endless nights

"my identity goes in vain, my life goes interrupted"

I mark my territory on sky

and i write my name on clouds,

on the verge of last moment

'ohm' seems to suffice, 'ohm' seems to last

my name doesn't..

Feel my worth in tiniest moments

warmth of blood makes me alive so,

walls behind my ego, when'll cease

life will seize precious breath...

Reviews

[Ana B.]

beautifully said Gaurav, make me pause and think about the certainties of life...

[Gaurav]

Thanks Ana for lovely comment.

[NeuroVersifier]

Good one. Thanks for sharing. I like your concept.

[Gaurav]

Thank you. Appreciate the review.

[An owl on the moon]

What a profound, rich rhythm of a life seeking the depth of itself. There is much moving in the darkness, but just the search for meaning and peace means you are aware of the world and what it is meant to be. Too many simply wander. Powerful words.

[Gaurav]

Thanks Froman for your appreciation.

[barleygirl]

Yours is the kind of poetry that I have to slow myself down to read, & read again, before I get glimmers of what you're trying to say. Your writing is very imaginative & original. I love the first two lines of stanza 3 . . . finding one's identity can often be a moving target (that is, ever changing as we evolve).

[Gaurav]

Thank you for reviewing the work. Appreciate it.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

well written poem! The title itself is satisfactory and gives an essence of the poem..
Poetic devices - metaphors are also enhancing it's sound

[Gaurav]

Hey Tazeen. Thankyou for liking the work. Appreciate it.

[andrew mitchell]

haunting comes to mind, the continuous knocking on your senses reminding. A profound write on dreams that have no endings but taunt!

[Gaurav]

Thanks Andrew. Appreciate your review on the work.

[sapna sagar]

Hi ....apki lines kahin na kahi mujhse b relate karti hai....well done.congratulation.

[Gaurav]

Thank you Sapna. I am glad that you liked it.

[3X3MPLER]

i dont think anyone could describe the situation any better, great poem

[Gaurav]

thank you for the positive feedback.

[Ruth]

Dreams can be so prophetic at times and yet at others, the brain defragmenting, sounds like a journey within, I often have such dreams when I feel I don't control my surroundings...potent piece :)

[Gaurav]

thank you for the review. appreciate it

[Kathrin S]

A good poem, I liked it. The beginning brought a strong image to mind - the first stanza was my favorite.

Two suggestions:
"my name don't" should be "my name doesn't"
"warmth of blood make(s) me"

[Gaurav]

Thank you Kathrin. Appreciate your review. I have edited the poem accordingly.