He needs Love

When i wake up

and see a night approaching,

i cry..

something out there

push me to bed,

i don't want nightmares...

Walking with you

to a certain distance

and returning home

- a dream once i saw..

something out there

remove the surface from earth

i don't want sky

'cause i will walk

i will not fly....

I want love

poured in honey of pureness,

alone though my body walk

i carry your memories...

don't give me dreams

i want love

Reviews

[sjgeorge35]

Extremely small b***h I have here with the title,.,. until I read the poem.

First part has a customary scrawl and stock, but it’s not mundane and more like point-blank. Good for this sort of fare in my opinion.

You do a great job surging the font of the speak, and though lines seem lapsed, there is something viable and alive in the way you drive this piece.

predictable but barren which gives it a weird edge.

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for the review. Appreciate it.

[Uche Paul]

Nice theme!!! Love is making its wishes... Do not wanna sleep on a mengre... Just wanna coo & bill on a bed of roses... Anyway, Mr Poet, life isn't always a bed of roses, its reality that needs to be experienced... Nevertheless, Peter Pan had said: Say what it is you desire, and see it appear in the morn... Hopefully, your maiden will hear you and let the love cascade into the "honey of pureness". I LOVE YOUR WORDS...

I'm giving you 70 percent.

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for the review.

[ExquisiteEyes]

I think the detached thoughts and lines have really cast the spell. And the theme is wonderful.

[Gaurav]

Thankyou. Appreciate it.

[Ruth]

Love is the healer of wounds, so it said, I can understand the need for wishing that instead of more nightmares :)

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for the review.

[Neha Sharma]

Who doesn't need love!
A potent emotion that can be one's sole weakness; that brings commitments, expectations, hurt, pain, endurance along with the intensely impassioned and beautifully beguiling sensation and yet we all yearn for love.
An earnestly simple yet profound interior monologue. A nice piece.
Keep writing. :)

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for taking out the time to review the work. Appreciate it.

[iand63]

I feel the final stanza could stand confidently on it's own Gauravv. Nice work.

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for the review.

[zunie frost]

i love this !!! I want love
poured in honey of pureness,
alone though my body walk
i carry your memories...
don't give me dreams
i want love
these lines really touches mt heart !! thanks for sending me request !!
fabulous work . keep it up

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for reviewing the work.

[zunie frost]

Welcome dear friend