Pessimism during Big Bang

No one was really happy on God's action

"Dense it is...not now"

hence He paved the way

to Life through blast, Gave us

the footprint of growth

that we never needed....

"Why is this distance?"

'on floating space was my mass

was i ready to love?

was i not safe in dense before?

when He created me

i cried for help,

am i to be 'flawless creation'?

unknown to even a tiny cell...

"Why build life?"

anger rooted in your Action

when you said "Boom"

i took away burning soul

who push me to anger everyday...

"When you stop?"

don't make me anymore

just build Nature

'cause it never cries,

stop being the Creator

feel the awkwardness of creation...

Reviews

[M P Ramesh]

Gauraw,
It's creation that matters
one may or may not create as others desire
but the issue is that he/she creats
it will stand also
I believe even HE was created by us
and HE can not ignore our existence
Isn't it the same what Che said
WE CAN NOT BE DEFEATED"


Carry on...........................


mpr

[Gaurav]

I am trying to understand your point of view Sir. Perhaps i need more insight and experience. However, thank for stopping by to give your valuable review. Appreciate it.

[Jacob Clifford]

I admire your tendency to look at things and flip them to show the darker, less noticed side.

[Gaurav]

Thankyou Clifford for your kind words. Appreciate it.

[jesserose99]

I do like what you have to say, it is thought provoking Guaravv. as always with your work. It makes me wonder if God has felt the awkwardness of creation, and thus gave us free will.

Still I see your point about anger at the base of creation with the big boom...it can be looked at as such...or a spark divine..in latin known as Gnosis. I really love your work because you have a spark divine yourself, where you are annoyed with all the anger. It is hard to get past that...

Only thing I can think of is to ask us to stop the anger too because incase God has left it up to us in an attempt to give us freedom. I love it when I have to think Guaravv! Thank you for your piece of art!

[Gaurav]

Thankyou so much for your apt analysis of the work Jesse. I don't know, i am so trapped in understanding the work of creation that i only see misjudgement. It might be a dark force inside me. But i am trying hard. And i will keep working on it. Never would the death prompt me to stop. Thanks again to visit.

[jesserose99]

Nor could death ever prompt you to stop Guaravv, and that passion that burns inside of you is a brilliant and beautiful thing. I think you will use it for good, I have read your poems and have been so moved. Keep on loving always, and use your will to stop the madness as best you can if you ask me, you have a powerful gift.

[Gaurav]

Sure Jesse. May it happen that i succeed in it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes i feel the rain is evidence of Nature crying, and she does get angry thus we have earthquakes, tornadoes etc. but at first everything was peace...and man created anger---not God...so thus now we all feel the awkwardness...and we are crying over the madness.

strong piece of writing.

j.

[Gaurav]

Thankyou so much for the review Sir. I warmly take your points.