Pessimism during Big Bang

No one was really happy on God's action

"Dense it is...not now"

hence He paved the way

to Life through blast, Gave us

the footprint of growth

that we never needed....

"Why is this distance?"

'on floating space was my mass

was i ready to love?

was i not safe in dense before?

when He created me

i cried for help,

am i to be 'flawless creation'?

unknown to even a tiny cell...

"Why build life?"

anger rooted in your Action

when you said "Boom"

i took away burning soul

who push me to anger everyday...

"When you stop?"

don't make me anymore

just build Nature

'cause it never cries,

stop being the Creator

feel the awkwardness of creation...

Reviews

[M P Ramesh]

Gauraw,
It's creation that matters
one may or may not create as others desire
but the issue is that he/she creats
it will stand also
I believe even HE was created by us
and HE can not ignore our existence
Isn't it the same what Che said
WE CAN NOT BE DEFEATED"


Carry on...........................


mpr

[Gaurav]

I am trying to understand your point of view Sir. Perhaps i need more insight and experience. However, thank for stopping by to give your valuable review. Appreciate it.

[zunie frost]

"When you stop?"
don't make me anymore
just build Nature
'cause is never cries,
stop being the Creator
feel the awkwardness of creation...
these lines really touches my heart !! it have a real deepness in it !!!
thank you so much

[Gaurav]

Thankyou so much for your kind words. Appreciate it a lot.

[zunie frost]

Welcome !!!!

[Uche Paul]

Brilliant effort in fusing the tales of the Bible and the lores of Evolution... But I hope you know you are creating a different testament, perhaps, out of bursting imagination that metamorphosed into this "Web of Thought". Yes, this poem is rooted in imagination., of course. But, what if there is no God that builds or creates? What if Humans are mere products of "Nature"? What if Humans, perhaps more developed, lived before the big bang we know? What if another big bang awaits present humans? What if the" Creator" doesn't need to feel nor suffer your perceived awkwardness of creation? What if the created were the ones that made existence awkward for themselves by unrepentantly attempting to defile the "Creator" consistently? What if the existence of a man is as the existence of a house fly?

[Gaurav]

You really have touched upon the soul of the question Uche. First of all, all your queries are very interesting and show the realm of curious mind. Beautiful.
I really went into imagining stuff that my anger and personal dissatisfaction from the world forced on me. I was not happy with the state of world we are living in. It ought to be perfect and it is because God ought to be perfect too. So this was what prompted me to write it.
Your questions have led me to new thoughts where i can ask these to myself and delve in lost world for months. This i can do because it is my favorite hobby. And i hope we could just discuss these questions too. It would have been a constructive exercise. But, my friend, look inside and you will come up with your own answers. And that would make you feel strong. Ultimately, we all know that there is no perfect answer. Though there are perfect questions.
Thankyou for your deep review into the work. Appreciate it from heart.

[Uche Paul]

You are welcome, bro!

[Uche Paul]

You are welcome, bro!

[Mister T.]

Indeed..
Nicely written poem. As I said before, I'm not really a believer, but it's an impressive piece anyway.
Good job!

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for the review. Appreciate the gesture.

[Riddhi]

I really liked it and yes the title was so capturing that i was attracted towards this poem and yes the poem was not different than your other writings..Great work..Keep it up and thanks for sharing...

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for your kind words. Appreciate it.

[iand63]

Stop being the creator
Feel the awkwardness of creation.

As poets we struggle at times to give clarity to our thoughts. These last two lines are worthy of the greatest of us. How true of us awkwardly created that we try to amend this by becoming creators.

Thoughtfully constructed piece Gauravv well done.

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for your kind words Sir. It really feels good to get positive reviews from you.

[iand63]

You're welcome Gauravv. A critical mind is a gift to evolution keep up the good work.

[wordman]

creation was destined to fall from the beginning ! the very few that were christians
was protected ,the vast amount that was not christian was not.some people believe that we have been
destroyed 6 times.. i know of at least two.. god knew what would happen with man,he created satan
and the angels that was expelled from heaven..not sure on the why`s and why nots,but maybe one day it will be clear

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for the insight. Really appreciate it.

[Neha Sharma]

Few really powerful words and vehemently strong emotional effusion. The indignant questions about life and creation are eloquently exhibited. A hauntingly morose write. :)

Experienced. Pondered. Composed.
Keep writing. :)

[Gaurav]

Thankyou Neha for your kind words. Means a lot.

[Neha Sharma]

You are welcome.

[PhoenixDown]

You are such a thinker, and I love that Gauravv. Your pieces often leave me unsettled - but that is a good thing! I like to be shaken.

[Gaurav]

Those are the magnificent words. Thankyou.