Pessimism during Big Bang

No one was really happy on God's action

"Dense it is...not now"

hence He paved the way

to Life through blast, Gave us

the footprint of growth

that we never needed....

"Why is this distance?"

'on floating space was my mass

was i ready to love?

was i not safe in dense before?

when He created me

i cried for help,

am i to be 'flawless creation'?

unknown to even a tiny cell...

"Why build life?"

anger rooted in your Action

when you said "Boom"

i took away burning soul

who push me to anger everyday...

"When you stop?"

don't make me anymore

just build Nature

'cause it never cries,

stop being the Creator

feel the awkwardness of creation...

Reviews

[M P Ramesh]

Gauraw,
It's creation that matters
one may or may not create as others desire
but the issue is that he/she creats
it will stand also
I believe even HE was created by us
and HE can not ignore our existence
Isn't it the same what Che said
WE CAN NOT BE DEFEATED"


Carry on...........................


mpr

[Gaurav]

I am trying to understand your point of view Sir. Perhaps i need more insight and experience. However, thank for stopping by to give your valuable review. Appreciate it.

[E.J. Michalec]

I really enjoy your style. I’m utterly consumed.

[Gaurav]

Thank you Em. You are the peace to heart :)

[dan]

Gaurav, A very taut and intense piece. Attention-grabbing and though provoking, a very nicely done write. take care...dan

[Gaurav]

Thankyou Dan.

[Emily]

Lovely wording!
Keep it up!!

[Gaurav]

Thankyou so much.

[andrew mitchell]

A profound write, showing just how life isn't meant to be easy with the frustrations seeping out in a splendid write!

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for the review.

[Perkele.7885]

I am not quite getting it, so I do not know whether to agree in principle or disagree with your point of view. Creation, to me, are like building blocks to a superior life form, in our case, in Christ's image!

[Gaurav]

Ohh, it was just a whim that prompted me to write a poem. May be i was angry with the things going on in my life or whatever and then i committed the mistake to blame Him or Her. So, positive force prevails. Thankyou for sharing your opinion. Appreciate it and like it.

[Perkele.7885]

Keep writing, expressing truth as you know them to be. Let others be the ones to form opinions on limited or non-factual information. Your writing will improve and you will feel the difference with each poem that you write.

[A.marie.speaks]

Love the interesting perspective you've taken in this piece. I found it inspiring and fresh. You got me thinking. Thank you!

[Gaurav]

Thankyou so much for the review. Appreciate your kind words.

[Solar]

just build Nature
'cause is never cries,

The curse of self-awareness that is part of human consciousness - when face to face with the Big Picture - that seems to be conveyed in this poem.

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for your kind review. Appreciate it.

[Vipin Behari Goyal]

Frustration of existentialist angst is apparent. A meaningful poem....well written

Vipin

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for the review Sir. Yes, there is anger.

[Mahi sain(Mahesh)]

Really nice bro.
It most effective,
i also read a writer story book"objection my lord",
i think its not possible that we can fight with lord for her own right,
but after read ur poem i feel some good that if all people of world read this poem after they how feel i dont knows but me really feel effectness,
thank u bro,for share with us,keep it up,

[Gaurav]

Thankyou brother for those kind words. Appreciate the review.