Being a Father

When love is not the core of a relationship, what comes out is life looked upon but never lived

I never told you,

yes, i cried when you revolted

against me.

I agree, i opposed freedom

and left your upbringing to nature's laws,

Decisions, which you had to make

i designed for you and forced upon.

I am a father but i am not a God,

How could i be so adamant,

slave of my superficial pride,

a pride to be a "Giver of Life."

I should've encouraged you,

when you failed to correct the note,

a note of your own composition,

yet i crushed your creativity

and ruined the ambition of your soul,

when i shouted in public.

You were silent, i noticed

but you were a 'supernovae in making'

this i now understand.

When you fell in love,

i changed the definition of love for you,

i said - "it ruins"

then you broke up

and yet it ruined you more.

When your mother died,

your eyes searched for a support,

in me, you still saw a bond

which i ignored from my manhood dominance.

Today, when i am dying

i know what you got

and i know what i got.

I can see, in your absence

that i was never alive,

i know, i could feel like a God

if i could be a father

Reviews

[Romalina]

That is the definition of an Indian father...I won't say whether its bad or good that he strives to dominate your entire life and take your decisions but I trust that he does so with a sense of duty to keep us in the right path.
Beautifully worded :)
Good Work!!

xxxxx
Romalina

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for understanding the intention behind. Every father wants to see his son/daughter in a place where he/she can survive. It's a cruel teaching process you know but its equally important.

[Neytri]

Its really very good and emotional indeed. You wrote your heart out...

[Gaurav]

Thank you for kind words. Appreciate it.

[Lilaa]

Wow, you have amazing talent! I love this poem. Keep up the good work and thank you for sharing!

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for those motivating words. Appreciate it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i especially like the ending---fathers come to an understanding sooner or later...i know mine did...he never understood my poetry, never wanted me to take it seriously..cause he didn't see what it could do for me..

and yet, we write because it's a need...he figured that out eventually...and realized even though he didn't understand it or me...he acknowledged it the best he could...sometimes for our own good fathers steer us away from things we want...but is it for our own good...or theirs? they try so hard not to fail us...that in some sense, they do, unwittingly....and yet we love them dearly.

j.

[Gaurav]

I completely agree with you Sir. Deep down, they understand it. But they live in a society and understand the harsh realities of life. It is not easy to survive on words or playing some instruments. It takes courage and requires struggles, sometimes unending. My father is a cancer patient and i know he feels for me and he wants to see me settled in life. He has aspirations for children and i am moved by this.

[Bibliophile-Tipsy]

Emotionally portrayed
Beyond Everything it's shows Your Love As A father
You didn't Destroyed soul
You Meant them to Live A strong life..
Anyhow one of your Good Writing i Found (:

[Gaurav]

Thank you for your kind words...but i wrote it as a Son...i am not a father (neither married) so can't understand the view from the other side...however, appreciate your review...

[Bibliophile-Tipsy]

Oww okay Gotted
You wrote this As a son..