Journey

with expert advice and much-needed editing by Jyoti...

A walk to the Sun

begins with a step,

holding hands of rays

speaking your desires..

The road emanates from spectrum

some visible, some invisible,

don't see through eyes

let the soul reflect...

Dimensions end where

you take a turn,

to become powerful,

choose to rise or fall..

Galaxies bathe in you 

in a whirlpool of novae,

smile and sadness collide

to make you the Sun.....your destination.

Reviews

[Anna]

Just wonderful! Please keep writing. I'd love to read more.

[Gaurav]

Thankyou so much Anna for your kind words. Appreciate it.

[Aero]

This one got me, im a sucker for astronomy and astrology. Very well written, Keep it up

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for your kind words. I love cosmology too.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

A strong, inspiring poem.
Liked the natural flow.
The simple words that you weaved together are emanating valour and hope.
Keep up the amazing work!

[Gaurav]

Thank you Jyoti. Please see the changes. And your words are the source of motivation, saying it again yet feeling it still.

[Gabriel]

Wonderful poem, very introspective.. which thing I like in poetry. Thanks for the post Gauravv.

[Gaurav]

Appreciate your kind words man. Thankyou for the review.

[Riddhi]

very nice poem...great work...keep it up....

[Gaurav]

Thanks Riddhi. Appreciate your kind words.

[Perkele.7885]

A journey that I am not yet prepared to take but, this next generation will as I am too old school and I am still catching up to today's new standards.
A fine poem with some eye-opening possibilities. Maybe Will will send me a post card!

[Gaurav]

Yeah, this journey is not easy to take for now. Let's wait for it until Will send us a post card. Thank you for the review. Appreciate it.

[CA Anurag Sharma]

So beautiful....
The road is full of spectrum
some seen, some unvisible,
Kindly correct this "Unvisible" typing error... please dont mind..

Anyways How often we fail to catch those invisible rays...so apt .... good one...

[Gaurav]

Thank you Anurag. Appreciated your kind words. Yes, i am editing it. Sorry for that.

[CA Anurag Sharma]

You are welcome... I hope you didnt mind... i know it was just a typo...

[Gaurav]

Didn't mind it at all brother. I am happy that you read it and point out the mistake. It was for the poem. Appreciate it.

[Willard Wells]

A positive journey you take and well done in the words of your trip.

[Gaurav]

Thank you for your kind words Sir. Appreciate it.