Journey

with expert advice and much-needed editing by Jyoti...

A walk to the Sun

begins with a step,

holding hands of rays

speaking your desires..

The road emanates from spectrum

some visible, some invisible,

don't see through eyes

let the soul reflect...

Dimensions end where

you take a turn,

to become powerful,

choose to rise or fall..

Galaxies bathe in you 

in a whirlpool of novae,

smile and sadness collide

to make you the Sun.....your destination.

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

firstly thanks for requesting me as a friend i have added you thankyou
i love this poem and really love the intricate wording
its quite beautiful thanks for sharing with us all

[Gaurav]

Thank you Julie :)
Glad you liked the poem. Appreciate it :)

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

no worries you are most welcome

[Chris Shaw]

The sun is so energising and powerful. Your words are uplifting Guarav.

Chris

[Gaurav]

Thank you Chris. Appreciate your feedback.

[Lavi]

Never read anything like this. Using the planets and the galaxy to describe a sense of journey was brilliant. I enjoyed this, nice work man.

[Gaurav]

Thank you so much Lavi :)

[Ranfer]

A lovely poem of journey👍👍👍

[Gaurav]

thank you so much :)

[millennial leo]

This poem has such beautiful imagery and paints a wonderful feeling. The first two lines are my absolute favorite and speak much about goals and the journey to reach them.

[Gaurav]

Thank you for your kind review :)

[Onlyme]

This really reach inside you and whirls around and you bask inside its glorious feelings of heavenly bliss and greatness.

[Gaurav]

Really appreciate your words dear. Thank you

[Onlyme]

Gaurav, your are an amazing young man with a wonderful heart and soul. Never loss that fact you are hear for a reason. One you touch people with your poetry like me. For one. And another reason is your lovely. A great person in general. I feel that from you. hugs Dawn.

[Gaurav]

That's a huge compliment Dawn - to be a better person. A new world i dream of where love will be the only religion. Creators will need people like you - sensitive, caring and full of love..hugs.

[Onlyme]

It takes one to know one sweetheart. Remember that Gaurav. You are special. No matter what type of bad day you are having please No that. honest Dawn.

[Gaurav]

That's the daily purpose i have - to fight with the self. Win or lose but fight. thanks Dawn. You too have a brave heart and be as you are - awesome :)

[Onlyme]

Gaurav. It takes one to know one. Wink. Stay strong sweetheart. Anytime. Remember drop me line. I mean that. hugs. Dawn.

[Sneh]

I too wanna get drifted to this amazing world and never ending path of rays. This piece of work is worth reading and intriguing. Thanks for sharing!
Sneh :)

[Gaurav]

Thank you Sneha for your sweet words :)

[Dayran]

A lovely poem ... my young friend. Nice ...

[Gaurav]

Thankyou for the review Sir. Appreciate it a lot.

[Emily]

Great poem!!
Great meaning!
Keep on writing!

[Gaurav]

Thankyou Emily. Appreciate those kind words.

[ExquisiteEyes]

Good one! The journey and reaching one's destination and its glorification has been portrayed nicely

[Gaurav]

Thankyou so much for your review. Appreciate it.