Mentiroso

restored.

i kind of wish
she'd bleed
a little harder
like these torrential
downpours
on christmas eve
sometimes i even
believe it;
the lies she conjures up
in her witch's cup
but now it's time to
laugh
and rejoice over all
the facts
i never needed this
to begin with
falsified drama
to bring about pity
quit slitting your wrists
for just this
second
and begin to carve
"PREVARICATOR"
upon your flesh
right at the
artery
bring forth platelets
and donate them
to me
pretty,
pret
ty
please

Reviews

[Mercy Manic]

OooooOOOOoooh, This is deliciously evil.

I love it.

Just be certain she is indeed a liar. This would be too cruel otherwise. Then again, misunderstandings are like that.

Great write. I like the choppy ambiguous style,

The breaking up of the words 'pretty please' made it for me. That is pure win!

[Lucky Me]

Someone who fakes it to get attention. I see the satire here. The first lines are so funny to me
"I kind of wish she'd bleed a little harder" You want her to feel the pain she says she feels so she won't be lying for one second. The last lines really will only make sense to you. They could mean a number of things as in 'do something practical w/ all the blood you're spilling' or any number of things. Cool write. I get it.

[Owlecks]

wow spooky. Mental problems much?

haha jk.

Hi, Im alex.

[Alex Ferraro]

Hey, this is an intriguing read!

I have to agree adding punctuation will regulate how the poem flows and make it a lot easier for the reader to identify with the poem. Also I'm just wondering about the last 'pretty', is it supposed to be broken onto two lines like that? If so, why?

Other than that its great, I'm going to read some more now :)

[Gastroc.]

haha, i don't usually mean for my writings to rhyme

[A.Crews]

i thought you didn't like rhyming. it look like your pretty f*****g good at it. great structure, great flow, i think i would have liked some punctuation in their, just to help me read it like you meant it to be read, but other than that, this is a fantastic piece. great execution.

[Girl, Interrupted]

as you say! "me want background infooooo"

[Legion]

An interesting piece if I ever have read one. Love the flow of it.

[Marilyn My Bitterness]

I'm bleeding pretty hard because of this already Britt. I totally agree with you, everything you say/said. You're right. Sorry is pointless at this point. But just because I love being redundant, i'm.sorry.

Anyway, amazing poem. Really lets the anger seep through to the reader. And I should know.