Beneath Thy Tide

Beneath Thy Tide

A Poem by Gary McDonald

Gentle doth this mid-wind feel

Where eyes hath left their perch

In search of land upon which I kneel

In bless’d shade of thee, grand birch.

May this eternal light now hide

From all that steals mild sight

Perhaps to home beneath thy tide

In hope be free of darken’d blight.

Savage souls doth seek to spoil

Thy Lord’s command of heart be driven

Upon which they plann’d, I doth foil

To serve to thee the love now given.

          Content with all that nature blends

          With grace of thee this heart now mends.

© 2010 Gary McDonald


Author's Note

Gary McDonald
I couldn't resist trying my hand at a sonnet before i move on from the 'old English' style. I'm not sure about meter, as i never set out to follow it, but if you have any suggestions on how to clean it up, let me know.

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Meter my friend is all important the ingredient which differentiates poetry from prose and makes your words flow smoothly read aloud
I enjoyed this piece of writing
May I suggest you get hold of a good source book Miller Williams patterns of poetry which explains clearltythe types and uses of meter
You obviously have a talent but need some to tools to enable it to flower fully
My advice to be taken or disregarded as you wish ivor ak poeticpiers

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Meter my friend is all important the ingredient which differentiates poetry from prose and makes your words flow smoothly read aloud
I enjoyed this piece of writing
May I suggest you get hold of a good source book Miller Williams patterns of poetry which explains clearltythe types and uses of meter
You obviously have a talent but need some to tools to enable it to flower fully
My advice to be taken or disregarded as you wish ivor ak poeticpiers

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is beautiful. I'm going to have to take another walk outside to enjoy nature more often. Excellent! :)
Thanks!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really enjoed this write. I found it very well written.
Love the flow and the rhyme scheme.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the way you have woven your words. This piece is a picture of grace my friend.
Wonder work!
RLG,
Tommy


Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i love the way you use the 'old english style' :p you painted a beautiful picture with your words, simply amazing! i loved it, never stop writing :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sir Gary, these words just lift the spirit with an elegance and beauty that is incomparable. You create a world richly filled with grace, and though forces try to usurp the wonder, love triumphs over all. Your writing truly transcends space and time in order to speak to hearts of any age!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your work plays a melody like the sweet serenade of caroling angels sing.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow what a great combination of old world poetry mixed with your modern flare... result, a divine interpretation of nature at its finest. very nicely done.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can offer no advice on meter, etc. I can say this is quite the lovely read.
I echo Emma.. some truly lovely lines in here..
You did very well Poet Brit..very well indeed..

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

And what a wonderful read it is .. the masters would be pleased with you! There are some lovely lines in this: 'Gentle doth this mid-wind feel - Where eyes hath left their perch - In search of land upon which I kneel - In bless’d shade of thee, grand birch. '

For the most part your metre is great, then towards the end, could be a little tidier but, the sonnet form is wonderfully sound and I truly love the picture you create with your words.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Gary McDonald

Crawley, West-Sussex, United Kingdom



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Do not love for the love of another, nor seek the sights already sought, live for the lives of the many, and your days will in time be taught. Gary I'll be swinging in from time to time, but.. more..

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