Just a simple piece, works better slowly, but it's up to you. I've tweaked it a little already, but i'll keep going till it sounds right. Hope you enjoyed it!
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Hmm I have indeed! (enjoyed this) The best part for me is I feel I write for similar -- if same -- reasons. Especially the first, words kept me from a long fall when my bedroom door wasn't enough of a barrier.
I liked it's simple beauty, and reasoned resolution. Well done friend! :)
But now all I know,
Is so long as I write often,
A happy man I may be.
The words above say it all .. you love to write .. and, it shows.
Though there are lines that could 'tweaked' a little more .. your words still flow, it's as if you're adventuring and surprise, surprise, find something new each time a phrase comes flying from your mind onto the screen or on paper.
I like this style, prose-poetry .. but have a feeling you'll experiment, travel, until you find a genre that gives you that special poetic tingle!
Hmm I have indeed! (enjoyed this) The best part for me is I feel I write for similar -- if same -- reasons. Especially the first, words kept me from a long fall when my bedroom door wasn't enough of a barrier.
I liked it's simple beauty, and reasoned resolution. Well done friend! :)
Ah, my young poet friend now sees.. what it is that drives writers..that internal motor of words, feelings, thoughts, etc. You are a gifted writer Poet Brit.. enjoy the word ride....
This is a profound recollection, a reflection of your heart and mind moving you to write... to freely express ideas and feeling on mutiple levels.. ultimately bringing that rich sense of joy when such words are given wings. I most associated my own writing with the third passage... The natural world brings my thoughts alive... Powerful piece!
Ww write for many reasons... to release feelings, to hide from reality or just to express our thoughts... and this was a great expression of what drives an artist.
It sounds good to me as is, Gary. After all, only you know the full meaning of it. One part is easily comprehended, and that is that creative people always must use their art as an outlet.
Do not love for the love of another,
nor seek the sights already sought,
live for the lives of the many,
and your days will in time be taught.
Gary
I'll be swinging in from time to time, but.. more..