Journey Through You

If these stars crumble, to fall as raindrops

painting the face that lies beside me

with each twinkle, to me a lullaby

I would gaze upon you, never to close my eyes.

 

If your splintered halo would weave the crown

atop and flowing beside your starlight face

with the dive of every finger, an escape

I would lose myself to all desire.

 

If aged mahogany could attach itself to silk

and blend into the perfect shade of your creation

with each embrace, my last wish

I would hold closely, for eternal heartbeat.

 

If all of this and more were true

to all I see as I now look upon you

would perfection be enough to say

I would never need write another day?

Author's Note

Hope you like it, I have no idea where it came from.

Reviews

[Jeannie Wilder]

And isn't it the best when it came to be from mystery? I love the idea of a "splintered halo" -- gives the concept image... I suppose that's what we would call imagery now isn't it?
"If aged mahogany would attach itself to silk
and blend into the perfect shade of your creation"
Have I told you your writing is beautiful? Damn.
p.s. love the ending with a question -- mixes it up and conveys the feeling in a satisfying finish.

[Tate Morgan]

I like it I read your work and am humbled beyond belief.I bow to your ability hewn from the hard life and love earned and spent

[Ellen Hammond]

Beautiful, poem full of emotion wonderful imagery. I love the 'splintered halo' it almost sounds as if someone whom you may have put too high on a pedestal you now see in more realistic light as the human being she is and still you cherish her.

[Alicante lullaby]

simple,elegant,perfect,,,,a pretty tapestry of words,,,could it be,stars that crumbled fell as raindrops to be inked by a tender,affectionate pen,,,,

[An owl on the moon]

What beautiful tenderness, your passion and desire drawing you nearer to the one you love... drifting deeply through space and time... Your words are elegant and beautiful, and your last lines are the perfect summation... Wonderful!

[cest la vie]

Where it came from? from that beautiful place in your heart, mind and soul..
This is glorious and tender..
Such a well written piece I am just astounded ..
You..you are flying Poet Brit...

[Simple_mee]

A beautiful write...."If your splintered halo..."! Your every poem amazes me!

[Erin Lee]

Now, now, now! Wasn't it you who wrote "do not love for the love of another?" No one should EVER get you to put down the pen! Your words are beautiful. I'm not sure if your muse here is a real life person, but it's clear that the emotion behind this is very real (even if dormant). love this poem. Thanks for sharing.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Sounds like it came from a wild soul looking for that special heart to hold... a lot of great emotional images in this piece. Fantastic writing.