Did I tell you?

Baby did I tell you,
That I am so in love.
Punch drunk nights,
And city gutters
Aren't as good as home.
Its been some years now,
And yes the world is changing,
But did I tell you baby,
That I'm alone again tonight.
The money is low, and nobody knows
A damn thing
But you. So please just write back baby,
saying I can come home again.
Cause did I tell you baby, that I'm alone again tonight.

Reviews

[Emily B]

it may be the wine, or you may be a genius, I really needed some time alone with poetry

glad to read you

[dan]

Such a plaintive write with such raw emotion governing the plea for redemption, you piece the elements together so well within the poem's structure. It leaves me rooting for the protagonist to reach its goal and win back her love. Very nicely written. take care...dan

[Not here]

this is a very emotional poem. you did a great job on this. :) awesome job

[Angelique]

Sad and loneliness, sounds to me like maybe she broke up with him and now he needs her back as she is the only one who understands him and what he is going through

[GarithRoland132]

Holy s**t you understand this poem haha this really is what it's about. Thank you so much

[Angelique]

Pleasure :) thank you for the read

[Chidoriflower]

I read the comments below and then I re-read the poem. It has a good flow. But it's a mess sounds like you (or the speaker) was drunk when writing this. Like an emotional mess. It's heartfelt and awesome

[Breanna Riddle]

it was okay but it did sound kind of like a letter but i like how you use past events init to create a sense of forshadowing

[B. Boileau]

The distance , the dark past and the almost desperate plea... This letter like verse is down right depressing. With an ever so slight hope of the world changing
Excellent !

[Daisy]

wonderful.... i can see the anxious and sad poet from this poem... who would truly love her...
great job

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of story in the poem led to hope of being allowed in again. Rarely does happen. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Aphy!]

Very nice attempt. For me..it sounded like a letter to someone. As I read it I was expecting a "sincerely yours" at the end. (That's just my opinion though) but overall it was a good read.
Aphy

[GarithRoland132]

That's awesome because that's what I was thinking too. I wanted it to be somewhat of a letter! So I'm glad you saw that