Consequences

This poem goes out for those who have been back to square one once again because of their decisions here me out and read this poem

Here we are once again

back at square one

the times have come close 

ive been pushing my luck

ive been wasting my time

i give it my all 

all in the wrong places

looking for love

finding only lust

whats happening with myself

have ive become more blind than i was

have i given everything to gain nothing once again

here i am sulking in my self pity once again

not this time ill stand tall walk myself through

its a long journey but its the path i chose 

no im paying that consequences

we have the choices in our finger tips

its our fault if we use it and we turn it to vile

what you get and what you make out of it

is what will decide your fate in the cruel world

choose wisely because sometimes youll find out to late.

Reviews

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Hey! So, I'm new to this website so I'm not exactly sure what you are used to with the whole review thing. I hope you like it, and possibly learn something from it. So, while reading this poem I realized that the message that you relayed was quite an inspirational message that anyone can relate to. Everyone has taken opportunities and used it wrongly. So, I believe that you portray that quite well in this poem.
The simplicity of this poem is quite good also. I like the way that you wrote it so anyone can take something from it. No matter what age they might be. I think that you have an amazing talent, and I'm thankful that you are using it the way you are.
I will say that the format is pretty good, the lines are pretty much the same size and the poem flows quite nicely. You put no punctuation in the poem, which is fine considering that poems can be formatted however you want. There are somethings that I would considering doing with capitulation and some punctuation that may make your poem that much better. So, the next paragraph is just suggestion and you please don't feel like you need to take them :).
1. I would say would be to capitalize the I's in your poem
2. ive could be like 'I've'
3. " choices in our finger tips" I believe you met 'on our fingertips'
Overall, this poem was spectacular! You have good word choice and an amazing meaning behind it all! Keep writing! You have a gift! Keep it up!

Stay Classic :)