Irony bleeds.

The cancer found it's host and the girl finally found what she wanted most.
There is no happy ending here...
She met him the day she heard she was going to die.
He met her the day he promised that he would give up trying.
They fell in love despite knowing that it was doomed.
They kept loving each other even though they knew that the end loomed.
She grew weaker and weaker.
For the cancer was starting to defeat her.
But he never gave up and even asked her to marry him.
They held a service with close family and friends,
Knowing that chances of a anniversary were very slim.
After a while she was bedridden and was forced to face the humiliation of using a bed pan.
Yet he was always by her side.
He fed her, he cleaned her and he never ran.
Then one day he left her alone for just a few minutes,
to purchase her some more painkillers.
But while crossing the street he got hit by a vehicle.
Irony bleeds because she attended his funeral.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Truth or not, there's a bitter and tragic irony in this poem. The penultimate line comes like a punch in the guts - hard, cruel and yes, as the final line says 'Irony bleeds because she attended the funeral,'

For me, this is more a tale than a poem and maybe would be better as such, more powerful rather than the 'doomed' and the 'loomed'; but of course, is your work, you have to do what you think best. This is your only poem I've read but think you have the power and emotions to write more than well, so, find your genre and go for it.

[Gareth6d]

Thank you so so much for reading it and giving feedback! Believe it or not I struggled with choosing between 'doomed' and 'loomed' but settled for the latter for who knows what reason :) and yes, I still have a lot to figure out. Maybe because I'm the only one that has read my writing! but your feedback has already given me much to think about and made me smile that you at least enjoyed it! Once again, thank you :)

[emmajoy]

:) Maybe attempt a piece of writing with just a teeny, teeny amile in it?