The View

I can see the city from here.
Blue yarn weaving in and out of yellow,
still stretched across the loom.
It sits amid the ocean
that matches your jeans
and the pink mountains
with the lavender shadows.

And between the mountains
and where we sit,
there is a road
that twists around
in no particular direction.

To feel that freedom,
with only the wind
to command your hair.
To fly around the curves,
with the navy trees
blurring past us.
To end up on that beach,
with the sand
that matches your skin.
To escape the rigid lines of the metropolis,
on the road
that leads anywhere.

But today
we�ll return
to that rigid grey scene
poured beneath our feet,
and wait nervously
for tomorrow.

Reviews

[Pax Analog]

You make a landscape whimsical, a painting to enter into.

Better the "wind command your hair" than that "grey scene" grab your feet.

Your poem has the timeless quality of all breezy escapes from the humdrum.

Like a bright summery delight of a picture, it invites the reader to refresh by escaping into its charming contours.

[Cassandra]

Oh how great..I very much enjoyed the free wheeling images in this. With only the wind to command your hair ... how lovely a line.

[Alyssa]

this was a good poem i liked it

[Steven Williams]

terrific use of imagery and description, nice read. Thank you for sharing it with me and for your submission in my contest.

~Stephen

[Joseph - Michael]

We all have our own point of views on everything, but you sure wrote it so well along with great deal of the details

On the other hand, it's a well written, so all is good...

[Travis Lawrence]

Great description, I can see it perfectly. The vivid colors remind me of a sunset, and I can picture the road winding around the mountain side. I too wish I could just pick up and leave the cities behind, a beach would be as good as any location, but as the end of your poem conveys, that's just not possible. It's a shame we must always return. I hope I was on point in my interpretation.

Have a nice day!

[Virellius an Fiach]

Hm. With each poem of yours that I read I find myself seeing images and sights that I myself have known and value very greatly. The sky, the water, mountains... such beauty is in your words, beauty that I too wish to capture in poetic form. Congratulations!

[~crazy Beautiful~]

Absolutely amazing writing
this painted a colorful image of beauty of the natural world, to the ugliness that we created in our own world, the created one.
You have quite a way with words
this piece moved me
thank you for entering my contest

[Antony]

Kimi, magnificent, to me it is like looking through the lens of a camera, snapping and then looking a the whole picture, I can see all the details and feel your emotion, that is good poetry.
Antony

[Emily B]

Amazing ending. Today we will return and wait nervously for tomorrow. I'm glad Jenny sent this my way.