Daddy

A girl and her dad

Daddy

I picked you some flowers

From down by the lake

They’re for you

Because I love you

You teach me things

Like how to ride a bike

Hold the back while I peddle

And make sure you don’t let go

I’m not ready

I can’t do this alone yet

Daddy, keep holding on

 

Dad

He proposed to me a year ago

And now we’re getting married

Your little girl all dressed in white

Smiling and crying

Tears of happiness

You look at me with tears as well

Not wanting to lose me

And as we get to the end of the aisle

I pull my hand from yours

He can take care of me

Dad, please let go

 

Daddy

I’m sitting beside you now

Feeding you as you struggle to breathe

It’s been many years

But now it’s your time

To leave this world

I hold back tears

As I watch you take ragged breaths

Coughing as you do

Your hold on my hand weakens

I grip your cold hand tighter

Daddy, don’t let go

Reviews

[Brook]

This is beautiful; it makes me think of my own father. He's (secretly) my favorite family member and I value my relationship with him a lot. I don't know what I'd do without him; he balances out the craziness of my other family members. The progression from "Daddy, keep holding on," to, "Dad, please let go," to, "Daddy, don't let go," is fantastic and really shows how the relationship changes through life. Great job with this.

[BLACK PRINCE]

Great poem! It shows a little girl who grew into a woman and has a deep love and affection for her dear father. She's a daddy's girl, always, no matter what.

[trainwreck]

This was totally beautiful. It really swept me off my feet and took me through my whole life with my own dad. Great job.

[HappyTaylor]

This is so sad...... I love the way it starts very happy and you call him daddy, and when you get older, you want him to let go, then as he's dying, you don't want him to let go.

[Shelby]

I love the progression of this poem. The last stanza paralells the first, and you use the Daddy, Dad, and Daddy to connect the three stanzas, again parallelling the first and third. I love how the second stanza is still connected to rest of the poem, but is a bridge between these stages of life. You represent the movement and changes of life, as well as the circular motion of the relationship between parent and child, the need, the seperation, then the reversed need. Very beautiful and so sad! If only we all could have such closeness with our fathers. Very intrigueing style and well written subject. Thank you for sharing this with me.

[Emilee Grimm]

This was sad enough to make me cry. Any daughter who has a good relationship with her father would feel the sorrow at the end of this poem. I like the way you began each stanza with "Daddy", then "Dad", then "Daddy" again, and ended each with a similar line. It is easy to feel all the emotions in this poem, which makes it more enjoyable. You are great poet! Keep it up!

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Excellent Job..!!!

[Julie Beth]

this was so sad i loved how you used three diffferent stages of you life and how important he was to you this was excellent great job :D

[Sunflower 20]

This is an incredible poem!! I love it :)
the way you used riding a bike to represent the unexpected changes of life was very clever, at least that's the meaning I got. I think many people can relate to this journey if a father and his daughter. Well done and keep it up!! :D

[.........]

I like it, powerful. I got all excited when I saw that you added a new poem, like I legit was like, "yesss i get to read a poem." but i am currently falling asleep as i am typing this...
anyway, the poem: love it. I really think it was a nice touch how you went from, "daddy" to "dad" to "daddy" again. It reflected the different stages of life, and the fac that at the end it reverts back to the first time, it portrays the love that the girl has for her father. I like this a lot, but it's a lot to take in at once. This may be one that I think about from time to time. It's the whole, "dont let go", "it's time to let go", "dont let go" thing, but not like a relationship kind of way, not like a friendship, but a fatherly daughterly bond.
I like the way you have set the memories here, as if they're playing on a screen, a soundless movie, where we can see the images and the movements. I'd say this is one of the best ones I have read of yours, good job! thank you for the last-second-of-awakeness read :)