You think you know fear?

Main description: A short poem about fear itself and just how deep you can get into what it is.

There's a fool that lived a dark

Unspeakable, silent life

But that's all laugh at the start

Until you gift him with a knife

Now he's vanished from the room

Someone's taken out the lights

As soon as you notice the full moon

The beast comes out from the night

You think you know fear?

You think you know fear?

Now it's coming back to you

The shoves, your words,your post, the fights

And your soul retreats down to hell

Once you finally see his eyes

As you quiver in your fear

You're an sitting duck on ice

You want to cry golden tears

As he lets you meet your own demise.

You think you know fear?

You think you know fear?

Now you're alone in the room

All other souls are outside

You break out five little words

"I thought you committed suicide."

Author's Note

My family is currently going through a huge tragedy causing my father to lose his job, the only person where i live who works, since mother is extremely sick and cant get a job, and myself, who is ineligible to work due to me not being able to get a drivers license.
I came up with this off the top of my head, no thinking, If I can do this, that's a bit of talent, right?
I'd like to ask you, the reader, this.....If you enjoy my work, PLEASE...share it? Do something that helps me spread to a wider audience...I'm not asking you to share it nonstop to make me famous, no....I just want my work to be appreciated enough for someone to notice and maybe get me a writing job or me be a freelancer writer....and maybe then I can support the family a bit because at this time, pretty much everyone is either ALWAYS at work, On drugs, or always in the hospital, this is probably my "Last Breath" but it's just worth a try...Thank you for reading.

Reviews

[Bear]

Critique: (You're an sitting duck on ice) it should be "You're a sitting duck on ice).

You seem to be a good at telling a story and you have a good imagination, I would suggest you consider short stories as this poem could be developed into a short or even a novel easily. Also if you are looking to earn money from your writing talents, you will find story writing is much more profitable even for someone your present age.

[Lyingwithlions]

Well written piece with a powerful message. Keep it up, and don't ever give in.

[Perkele.7885]

everyone deserves a chance to express themselves in a public medium/ even more so if they are gifted and they are speaking about something that the the public has it's collective eye on, as this will garner attention.
This attention could go as the wind blows or as the public issue goes or she may invent herself in the eye of the newsmedia

[Coyote Poetry]

A nice flow of thoughts led the reader to the surprise ending. I like the feel of danger and mystery in your words. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Dark Poet]

Such a sad piece, but wow...you are an amaIng writer and i will share this with as many as I can. I hope being a writer works out for you and i truly hope things get better for you. The last part...it catches you off breath. And the thing is...it's not little words, they mean so much. And yet they are little. I know im not making sense, but as the writer, maybe. Always admired your writing. Youre truly talented

[FaeryQueen]

such a tragedy! my hopes and prayers are with you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[....................]

there are many things in this world beyond our control but how we respond to them isn't one of them... that you live in an abusive world where sickness and the struggles are rampant and still manage to write and share it with us means you have already chosen to do something about it...I commend you for sharing your story in poetry and for your drive to want to help your family...and if you want to be a writer then just keep writing and remember to read, read, read... on this site you will gain far more recognition if you read and review the work of others...good luck...

[Satan]

Fear affects those who submit to it. Stay firm and believe things will get better because if you don't they never will.

[Pratishtha Rastogi]

U have immense talent in you and the way you expressed... is simply superb...

[M. George]

You are a talented writer! If this just came off of the top of your head, then you clearly do have a knack for writing :)

I'm sorry to hear about your situation. Writing, as I'm sure you know, can be a really great release. I can't say I can understand your living situation, but hang in there. Keep writing and try to get noticed - I know that's easier said than done, but it can be a goal you set yourself.

One way of getting more recognition is if you review lots of other peoples' work, as they're then more likely to check you out and review yours back. Stay strong :)