Painless

I go inside myself to find my soul is gone I once took to blades and scars, hoping to find my battles won I see spirits dancing in the night, in their darkest cloths Your loves comes in kisses and smiles, mine comes in knives and bows I go inside myself to find my soul is gone For now I hide in the dark when its nearing dawn Maybe one day I'll feel the pain they expect for the heart I lack Why get back up when behind you, you see your past is back? I go inside myself to find my soul is gone You may have me on a leash But in life, I’m barely hanging on. I see colors fade away the more I walk this road Now my guardian angel, will you cure my nonexistent soul?

Reviews

[Stephen]

I like the questions at the end that your nonexistent soul be cured. Very gloomy peace but you nicely done. Thanks for sharing

[KanaDream]

This is very well done. I like the challenge at the end "Now my guardian angel, will you cure my nonexistent soul?" You can't cure something that doesn't exist... yet the question is still posed. The flow is smooth and the rhyme is nice as well. Keep Dreaming ^^

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful poetry my friend.'
"I go inside myself to find my soul is gone
You may have me on a leash But in life, I’m barely hanging on.
I see colors fade away the more I walk this road
Now my guardian angel, will you cure my nonexistent soul?"
I like the edge you took the reader with in this poem. Above lines were strong and honest. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Avinash]

Despite the darkness and hopeless in your situation I notice a strong urge for redemption.

[Luna Zerimar]

As always, it's really dark, but amusing.

It's a little too dark this time though.

Actually made me flinch. x

[Rana]

This kind of a dwelling, the one you've described, it's amazingly fanciful. It's dark yet appealing. But it ain't as satisfying a way to live as it might seem, all painless and soulless. I like the pun on soul. Favorite line would be 'I see spirits dancing in the night, in their darkest cloths'.