Falldown

When i broke into tears, i wrote this in my head.

Don't ask if i'm sad

Don't ask me why i'm crying

Please don't ask me why I walk into here looking like I'm dying

Just know i'm not lying, when I told you I am trying.

But there's a reason, why I've been this quiet for years

Out of the ordinary, Hell, I even wrote this song with my tears.

The depression became to much to steer, I became out of control

I know that you said your here, but I feel i'm fighting this battle alone.

But similar to all my friends, you know i have emotions

My happiness is a small sea, but the depression is an ocean.

All the people know is what they see on my outside

True pain is only heard when you take the time to hear the inside cry,

I'm sure by today's standards, I'm just going through a stage

But i didn't know a stage could last from the time you was age 8

Yeah, I'm sure you know how it feels to lose someone you love

I find myself sitting at his grave, screaming above.

And Don't think I remember what we had, Yeah our song.

I almost break into tears and yelp every time it comes on.

People say I need help, Like i don't know it already

Needing help with this one bullet I need to put through my he-

Wait i made a promise not to do it, And i made it to you

How could i forget that? It's pathetic, it's true.

Dear old friend, If you're looking down at me from heaven

Just want to say i'm sorry for the sins that I have set and will be setting.

Looks i won't be able to ever meet you when i'm gone after all

Maybe on my way down, I can scream for you, listen for my call.

And if you call back for me, I'll fight Satan if i have to

He will make another hell for me, I just want to hug you.

Cause I loved you.

Reviews

[Saddam]

Nicely done write here friend.
i enjoyed reading it.

[Wanderlustful]

You really expressed the emotions very well. I like the intensity of it. Good job :D

[Ruth]

I like the structure a lot, adds more impact...such an intense piece...as a song, would work great...hold on the bullet though - life has a habit of showing new sunsets when rock bottom, enjoyed xo

[Rana]

Amazing how you create the perfect rhymes while perfectly expressing the emotions; with a perfect chain of thoughts, and into a perfect conclusion.. Its just great.

[Ghost Writer]

Thank you for always sending me read requests for your work, it is always amazing

[Emmy Cannon]

Really emotional!!! I really love it! Keep going it soo good! Can't wait too read more!

[Avinash]

Hey Doug. This once is quite intense and dark. I like the lyrical and musical value of your words. Your writing is brilliant and we need to see more of your work. So keep postponing the bullet part :)

[jennifer little]

nice write i enjoyed reading it keep up the amazing work

[misha]

Such a sad piece full of tragic beauty. This was a wonderful write that captured my heart. Keep writing because you have a wonderful talent.

[Luna Zerimar]

I'm struggling to type.

Got me in tears. I guess I'm letting all the grief out.

Lost several friends. All whom I would've dedicated this to if I wrote this.

Loved this. So much.

Filled my stomach and heart with sorrow, and filled my head with precious memories.

Thank you.