Two Sides of me (Song i wrote)

Basically this song compares me and my alter ego (Xavier Fox) in one lyrical battle.

I'm not blind at all, I choose not to see.
I close my eyes and wait for someone smart to rescue me
But do they rescue me? Or simply become part of the problem?
Not many try because my saws of chains scared them often.
I walk this path self-blindfolded
Looking at the past i molded.
Look at all the people i showed that
I could face the devil and all my boulders.
And as i grow older, i begin to realize
I could've made it, I could've prevented my demise.
But i fueled my hate with blood from my skin
A boiling liquid, heated by the metal pen that i grip.
As it rolls across my skin, i was close to signing with it.
Then i realized i could write alone, Then i went supersonic with it.
Threw the pen away, took the pain away, made myself stay away
From the hate of Satan, Get my grip, Dragged myself to the gates.
Apologize for my lies and for my signs of wanted demise
Beg to forgive all my sin and hate that was born in disguise.
I wanted a talent but i didn't want this size.
There's a little boy in my heart, and alone, he cries.
(Chorus)
Let me out of this dark place, let me wake up
Get me out of this small space, Pick the weight up.
I Need to pick up my pace, but it's too heavy.
Maybe my evil twin could have a hand to fetch me?
All these voices in my head won't tell me that i'm dead.
But it's all done and said, The dark is all well and fed.
I bet I'm more insane that you would ever expect?
Let me switch heads and see which opinion you like best.
(Chorus)
I'm the 4th level of the devil but the 1st of the best.
I conquer all competition but still i lay here in rest.
There's blood on the dance floor, my suicide stays in silence.
A dead bouncer on the fountain who tried banning me for violence.
Inside is what you don't want to see, outside is the same.
Both ways are demonic, It's comical as i conquer this game.
Comical insanity, Slaughtering all anti-profanity.
If they survive they are amputees and if not that, vegetables Screw judgement, i'm a cannibalistic mystic
Is it wrong to you or are you just pissed you missed it?
I know there's a target on my head, i painted it myself.
I know i'm an lyrical artist, i got fresh blood for health
I read the secrets of my alter ego, locked on the shelf
Turns out I'm the bad guy, who makes himself write
Lies and vile lines about wives and inside kids who both die?
Oh my, it's wise not to comprise an end to my violence
It's a vibe, a strong hive the size of two full Best buys
I wanted a talent but i needed a bigger size.
There's a little boy in my heart, and alone, he cries.

(Chorus)

Author's Note

This is some of my best work...

Reviews

[Shitsune Hyuuga]

Wow this is a pretty good one. I look forward to hearing this with music. This is going to be a great song when recorded like how it is great as a poem.

[Elina]

You've done a very nice job with this; your words speak volumes beyond even what is written. Probably one of my favourite lines in this was "I walk this path self-blindfolded."
I did notice a couple spots where I think you were intending to use a different word than what was written...

"I bet I'm more insane that you would ever expect?" I believe you were wanting "than" rather than "that." Also...you don't need a question mark at the end.
"If they survive they are amputees and if not that, vegetables Screw judgement, i'm a cannibalistic mystic" I gather by the capitalization of "scew" that it was supposed to become a new line there...?
"I know i'm an lyrical artist..." Because "lyrical" begins with a consonant, you don't need "an," but rather, "a."

I hope it doesn't seem overly critical of me to point these out...they were just some things I noticed and figured I would mention. All-in-all, this was a very nice piece.

[Jack Wolfe]

As I told you earlier this is not area of expertise. I had to read this several times because I was trying to put music to it. Granted my perception of this maybe 'way off'. It seemed to start off as an Aaron Lewis piece when he was with 'Staind', then picked up and thrashed like Metallica then settle back down to Lewis, then back up again.

I'm probably way off, but I said I'd take a look.

[Violet Stone]

All I can say is WOW. This is totally amazing and I can easily see it becoming an actual song! Really awesome and I see nothing wrong with it!

[Patricia]

This is truly awesome! I have wrote a lot of songs, poems, stories, my brother writes music and this is something we would both love. It's dark but not really dark. It is actually very bright. Not an easy thing to pull off.....Great work!

[Ruth]

I like this and being in a band myself can hear it played - heavy drums...panned vocals...flanged guitar here and there, maybe a twelve string bridge - sorry, I ramble ;) lol Potent lyrics hon x

[Stephen]

Yeah, Of course, this one`s your best work indeed. I read some lines as a rap song in this piece. Very beautiful song. It showing the power of aggression through the muses .. it`s an extremely brilliant job. Lovely song .. I really enjoyed reading this one. Keep it up the great performance!

[Sami Khalil]

A good try at a song format. Thank you for sharing...:).............

[Ghost Writer]

This is one of the best songs I really love your writing style.Whenever I read your writing I find myself wanting to talk to you.The way you write is special, I am so glad you give me the pleasure to read your master pieces.

[Luna Zerimar]

This was beautiful. When I'm reading it, it sounds like a song. Also, I don't know if it's just me, but did you reference to some bands?

[Douglas Levi Gribbins]

I did reference some bands.

[Luna Zerimar]

Suicide Silence & BOTDF are amazing. Anyway, good job.